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In many parts of the world, there is continuous coverage of sports on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss this view and give your own opinion? v.1

In many parts of the world, there is continuous coverage of sports on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss this view and give your own opinion? v. 1
Nowadays, in many countries, there are plenty of television channels broadcasting live sports event, therefore, some people argue that this demotivated the juvenile to participate in sports. I completely agree with this statement that it affects young people involve in sports because this makes them lazy and wasting their valuable free time. This essay will first discuss how watching sports make them unwilling to play, then it is wasting their spare time, followed by a reasoned conclusion. One of the main drawbacks of continuous coverage of sports in that this is making teenager people lazy. This is because adolescents are starting love to watch sports instead of actually playing the games. For example, a recent study showed that in Bangladesh 85% of young people love to watch the live game, in contrast, only 10% of the teenager is playing the real game. As a result, sports coverages make youth unwilling to play games. Another disadvantage of live telecast sports for the adolescent is that they spent their free time watching games. This is due to that young people are often under pressure for their study and their time schedule are very limited. if the watch sports in their spare time, they do not have ample time to play. Therefore, I believe that sports channel discourages young people from taking part in sports. In conclusion, there are many continuous telecasts of sports event on television. This makes young people lazy to take part in sports and spending their free time watching sports instead of playing. It is recommended that a teenager should take more part in sports than watching it.
Nowadays, in
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countries, there are
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of television channels broadcasting
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sports
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event
,
therefore
,
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some
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people
argue that this demotivated the juvenile to participate in
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sports
. I completely
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agree
with this statement that it affects
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young
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people
involve in
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sports
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because
this
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makes
them lazy and wasting their valuable free
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time
. This essay will
first
discuss how watching
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sports
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make
them unwilling to play, then it is wasting their spare
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time
, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

One of the main drawbacks of continuous coverage of
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sports
in that this is making
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teenager
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people
lazy. This is
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because
adolescents are starting
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love
to
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watch
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sports
instead
of actually playing the
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games
.
For example
, a recent study
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showed
that in Bangladesh 85% of
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young
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people
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love
to
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watch
the
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live
game,
in contrast
,
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only
10% of the
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teenager
is playing the real game.
As a result
,
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sports
coverages
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make
youth unwilling to play games.

Another disadvantage of
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live
telecast
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sports
for the adolescent is that they spent their free
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time
watching
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games
. This is due to that
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young
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people
are
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often
under pressure for their study and their
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schedule are
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very
limited.
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if
the
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watch
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in their spare
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time
, they do not have ample
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to play.
Therefore
, I believe that
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sports
channel discourages
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young
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people
from taking part in sports.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
continuous telecasts of
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sports
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event
on television. This
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makes
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young
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people
lazy to
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take part
in
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sports
and spending their free
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time
watching
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sports
instead
of playing. It
is recommended
that a
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teenager
should take more part in
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sports
than watching it.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many parts of the world, there is continuous coverage of sports on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss this view and give your own opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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