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In many modern societies, grandchildren spend any time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this? v.2

In many modern societies, grandchildren spend any time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this? v. 2
In the modern world, family’s relationship is a discussed topic. One of them is the time grandchildren spend with their grandparents. In this essay I will further explain the consequences of this and give my opinion. Sociologists claim that family relationships has different concepts in different countries, heritage and culture. For instance families from Latin background tend to be closer than others background. Therefore, it is ordinary in a house of a family from Latin background we have a grandparent living together. For instance, in Italian families it is very common take the grandmother to live in your house instead to enrolled her on an Aged care house. However, in Australia, Aged care houses are very common. Despite the differences of culture and background, some people believe that be closer to your grandparents has some advantages. First, grandparents have the most information from your family and can tell stories that will make you know better your family. Second, grandparents has more free time to take care of the children, especially when both parents work, a hand from grandparents can be very useful. Third, it is important to an ageing feel useful and for some of them be useful helping educating their grandchildren is very reward. On the other hand, there are some concerned about how much liberty the grandparents has on children education. Some people believe that it is very vital to set boundaries. For example, nowadays both parents need to work and they ask for grandparents take care of their kids. However, if they do not have a clear conversation about boundaries this can become a family issue. In addition, some parents do not have a good relationship with their parents and this has a consequence on grandchildren, which will be private to spend time with their grandparents. This essay discussed the relationship between grandparent and grandchildren. In my opinion, spend time with your grandparent is beneficial for grandchildren and vice versa. However, it is important for the family work together and set boundaries to make sure that all roles can be respected.
In the modern world,
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family’s
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relationship
is a discussed topic. One of them is the
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time
grandchildren spend with their
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grandparents
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further
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explain
the consequences of this and give my opinion.

Sociologists claim that
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family
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relationships
has
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different
concepts in
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different
countries, heritage and culture.
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families
from Latin
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tend to be closer than others
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background
.
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, it is ordinary in a
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house
of a
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family
from Latin
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background
we have a
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grandparent
living together.
For instance
, in Italian
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families
it is
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very
common take the grandmother to
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live
in your
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house
instead
to enrolled her on an Aged
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care
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house
.
However
, in Australia, Aged
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are
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common.

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,
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believe that be closer to your
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advantages.
First
,
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grandparents
have the most information from your
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family
and can
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tell
stories that will
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make
you know better your
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family
. Second,
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has more free
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time
to take
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of the children,
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work, a hand from
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can be
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useful. Third, it is
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to an
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feel useful and for
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of them be useful helping
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educating
their grandchildren is
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reward.

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has on children education.
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vital to set boundaries.
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work and
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ask for
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conversation about boundaries this can become a
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issue.
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,
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do not have a
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good
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relationship
with their
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parents
and this has a consequence on grandchildren, which will be private to spend
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time
with their grandparents.

This essay discussed the
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relationship
between
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grandparent
and grandchildren. In my opinion, spend
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time
with your
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grandparent
is beneficial for grandchildren and vice versa.
However
, it is
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important
for the
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family
work together and set boundaries to
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make
sure that all roles can
be respected
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In many modern societies, grandchildren spend any time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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