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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to set realistic goals than ambitious goals. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v.23

Question: It is more important to set realistic goals than ambitious goals. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v. 23
Although some people tend to believe that it is better to set ambitious goal, I am prone to think that setting realistic goals is more reasonable. The reasons for my opinion will be discussed in details below. My position is based on my own experience. Once you are sure that your goal is achievable you can design a plan which will organize your actions. For instance, after I gave up smoking, I got excessive weight, in fact I used to weigh 71, 5 kilograms but after the change my mass increased up to 116 kilograms. I set a realistic goal to lose within three months 12 kilograms. In order to achieve this result, I created a detailed plan which was a guideline for me. I counted how many calories I ought to consume per day and how many of them I should spend in a gym. The goal was achieved. However, I am sure that The second reason to set realistic goals is motivation. If you have an achievable goal, the first positive results which you get will motivate you to continue. To support this idea, I might return to my previous example, after I lost my first 3 kilograms, my spirit was up and my motivation was growing with each lost kilogram. Interestingly, then more kilos I lost, then harder and stubbornly I worked with my body. I am completely sure that if a goal had been ambiguous, for instance, I wanted to lose 35 kilograms at once, I, would not have achieved the result and probably I would have given up the idea. Finally, I think that setting unrealistic or ambiguous goals is not only often useless but might be harmful. Once, when I was a student at university, I decided to write a research for psychology within unreasonably short time – two days. Because the goal was too ambiguous, I could not create a plan which I might use, as a result, my sprit fall as well as my motivation. The research was not written in time and I got a negative score. At the same time, I dare aver that if I set a realistic goal, for instance, I requested two weeks, the result would have achieved and my mark would have been high. In conclusion, my own life experience suggests that having in mind realistic and achievable goals is more beneficial because it allows developing a plan and creates motivation which feed person’s desire to work harder.
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some
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tend to believe that it is better to set ambitious
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goal
, I am prone to
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think
that setting
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realistic
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goals
is more reasonable. The reasons for my opinion will
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details
below.

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is based
on my
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own
experience.
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Once
you are sure that your
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goal
is achievable you can design a
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plan
which will organize your actions.
For instance
, after I gave up smoking, I
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got
excessive weight, in fact I
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used
to weigh 71, 5 kilograms
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but
after the
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change
my mass increased up to 116 kilograms. I set a
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realistic
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goal
to lose within three months 12 kilograms. In order to achieve this
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result
, I created a detailed
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plan
which was a guideline for me. I counted how
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many
calories I ought to consume per day and how
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many
of them I should spend in a gym. The
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goal
was achieved
.
However
, I am sure that

The second reason to set
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realistic
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goals
is
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motivation
. If you have an achievable
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goal
, the
first
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positive
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results
which you
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get
will motivate you to continue. To support this
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idea
, I might return to my previous example, after I lost my
first
3 kilograms, my spirit was up and my
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motivation
was growing with each lost kilogram.
Interestingly
, then more kilos I lost, then harder and
stubbornly
I worked with my body. I am completely sure that if a
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goal
had been ambiguous,
for instance
, I wanted to lose 35 kilograms at once, I, would not have achieved the
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result
and
probably
I would have
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given
up the
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idea
.

Finally
, I
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that setting unrealistic or ambiguous
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goals
is not
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useless
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but
might be harmful. Once, when I was a student at university, I decided to write
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a research
for psychology within
unreasonably
short time
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–
two days.
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Because
the
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goal
was too ambiguous, I could not create a
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plan
which I might
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use
, as a
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result
, my
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sprit
fall
as well
as my
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motivation
. The research was not written in time and I
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got
a
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negative
score. At the same time, I dare aver that if I set a
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realistic
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goal
,
for instance
, I requested two weeks, the
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result
would have achieved and my mark would have been high.

In conclusion
, my
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own
life experience suggests that having in mind
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realistic
and achievable
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goals
is more beneficial
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because
it
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allows
developing a
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plan
and creates
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motivation
which feed person’s desire to work harder.
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IELTS essay Question: It is more important to set realistic goals than ambitious goals. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v. 23

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
412 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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