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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this? v.7

The population growth in the developing countries has led to major issues such as poor water quality and unhealthy air quality. This essay will discuss how government in those countries can curb these rising problems. Poor quality of air and water supply to each household are the major concerns. These issues are caused by the increase in the demand by the increasing population. For example, increasing population wants to build their own houses which puts pressure on the factories to produce more bricks. In addition, to produce the demanding bricks, industries are using fossil fuels so that they can boost their supply. Therefore, to reach the demand of the growing population industries are releasing hazardous air in the atmosphere which results in unhealthy air quality. To mitigate water and air population, government has to intervene and take major steps. The concern bodies should create laws and set of rules and regulation so that the construction organization does not hamper the environment. As an example, the government should create a technology or assign group of people a task to keep regular check on the use of fossil fuel by the industries. Therefore, the only way to reduce these growing problems are major steps by the government bodies. To conclude, hazardous air quality and unhealthy drinking water are problems caused by the increasing population. This essay discussed how government can take strict action so that the situation does not go out of our hands.
The
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population
growth in the
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developing countries
has led to
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major
issues such as poor
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water
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quality
and unhealthy
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air
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quality
. This essay will discuss how
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government
in those countries can curb these rising problems.

Poor
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quality
of
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air
and
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water
supply to each household are the
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major
concerns. These issues
are caused
by the increase in the demand by the increasing
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population
.
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, increasing
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population
wants to build their
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own
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houses
which puts pressure on the factories to produce more bricks.
In addition
, to produce the demanding bricks, industries are using fossil fuels
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so
that they can boost their supply.
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, to reach the demand of the growing
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population
industries are releasing hazardous
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air
in the atmosphere which results in unhealthy
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air
quality.

To mitigate
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water
and
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air
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population
,
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government
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has to
intervene and take
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major
steps. The concern bodies should create laws and set of
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rules
and regulation
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so
that the construction organization does not hamper the environment. As an example, the
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government
should create a technology or assign group of
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people
a task to
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keep
regular
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check
on the
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use
of fossil fuel by the industries.
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only
way to
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reduce
these growing problems are
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major
steps by the
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government
bodies.

To conclude
, hazardous
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air
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quality
and unhealthy drinking
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water
are problems caused by the increasing
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population
. This essay discussed how
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government
can take strict action
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so
that the situation does not go out of our hands.
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IELTS essay In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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