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Cycling is healthier and environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v.1

Cycling is healthier and environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v. 1
It is undeniable cycling is a useful activity to increase fitness level and prevent the deterioration of the environment. This essay will analyse some reasons why it does not gain popularity and suggest any methods to tackle this issue. There are some sound explanations why people still take no interest in cycling. The first reason is that they consider their comfort the top priority. That is the reason why they have a tendency to favour quick and convenient kinds of transportation, including cars or motors, instead of cycling which is physically exhausting activity. Other than that, the neglect of bikes can be attributed to the lack of lanes for cycling commuters. In comparison with other vehicles, bikes have far lower speed, which means that if bikers have to share lanes with others, they can be faced with the potential risks of fracture, permanent disabilities or even fatalities caused by traffic accidents. However, the government can implement some solutions below to arouse more interest from the public into cycling. First of all, they should allocate financial resources to install separated lanes only for the sake of cycling. According the aforementioned idea, sharing streets with other vehicles can pose a threat to cycling commuters; therefore, this approach may maintain their safety. Moreover, the authority can impose heavy taxes on vehicles which can be considered as a culprit behind the higher volume of atmospheric greenhouse gases. The reason is that people will transfer to use bikes that are environment-friendly transportation with a view to relieving financial burden, which contributes to the increase in the use of bikes. Ultimately, the government can carry out some educational campaigns to heighten people’s awareness of the roles of cycling in the protection of the environment. All in all, cycling is not the top choice because of road infrastructure and people’s attitudes; thus, the government has responsibilities to solve them.
It is undeniable
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cycling
is a useful activity to increase fitness level and
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prevent
the deterioration of the environment. This essay will
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analyse
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some
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reasons
why it does not gain popularity and suggest any methods to tackle this issue.

There are
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some
sound explanations why
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people
still
take no interest in
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cycling
. The
first
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reason
is that they consider their comfort the top priority.
That is
the
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reason
why they have a tendency to
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favour
quick and convenient kinds of transportation, including cars or motors,
instead
of
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cycling
which is
physically
exhausting activity.
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Other
than that, the neglect of
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bikes
can
be attributed
to the lack of lanes for
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cycling
commuters.
In comparison
with
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other
vehicles,
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bikes
have far
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lower
speed, which means that if bikers
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have to
share lanes with others, they can
be faced
with the potential
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risks
of fracture, permanent disabilities or even fatalities caused by traffic accidents.

However
, the
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government
can implement
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some
solutions below to arouse more interest from the public into
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cycling
.
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First of all
, they should allocate financial resources to install separated lanes
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only
for the sake of
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cycling
.
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aforementioned
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idea
, sharing streets with
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other
vehicles can pose a threat to
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cycling
commuters;
therefore
, this approach may maintain their safety.
Moreover
, the authority can impose heavy taxes on vehicles which can
be considered
as a culprit behind the higher volume of atmospheric greenhouse gases. The
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reason
is that
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people
will transfer to
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use
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bikes
that are environment-friendly transportation with a view to relieving financial burden, which contributes to the increase in the
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use
of
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bikes
.
Ultimately
, the
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government
can carry out
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some
educational campaigns to heighten
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people’s
awareness of the roles of
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cycling
in the protection of the environment.

All in all,
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cycling
is not the top choice
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because
of road infrastructure and
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people’s
attitudes;
thus
, the
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government
has responsibilities to solve them.
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IELTS essay Cycling is healthier and environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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