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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this? v.5

In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this? v. 5
There is no doubt that industries and constructions are one of the major contributors to air pollution. Today, many developing nations are suffering from air and water pollution caused by industries and construction. This essay is going to discuss the solutions for this problem and support them with relevant examples. Firstly, one way to address this problem can be to plant more trees and plants in the areas surrounding the factories and construction sites. This is because trees are natural filters that can help in filtering out any harmful substances in the air. For example, one of the most polluted nations in the world, China, has considerably reduced its air pollution levels by using vertical gardens, which contain several plants to clean the air. Secondly, shifting of the factories, and preparation of construction materials away from the cities and nearer to forests can be a viable solution. Instead of planting trees in the cities, which cannot accommodate adequate trees, moving out the factories to the areas where trees are readily available can be more useful. For example, several factories in Hyderabad were shifted from cities to rural areas, which not only reduced the pollution level in the city, but also, had a negligible effect on the rural areas because most of the pollution was filtered out by the trees. Furthermore, governments of developing countries can impose quality restrictions on materials used in factories and construction, so that the polluting chemicals released from the cheap materials can be nullified. To conclude, planting more trees, moving the factories out of the cities, and ensuring that only quality materials are used in these factories can be the solutions to tackle the problem of reduced air quality. In my view, it is the government's responsibility to tackle this issue by considering some of the above-mentioned suggestions.
There is no doubt that industries and
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constructions
are one of the major contributors to
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air
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pollution
.
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Today
,
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many
developing nations are suffering from
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air
and water
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pollution
caused by industries and
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construction
. This essay is going to discuss the solutions for this problem and support them with relevant examples.

Firstly
, one way to address this problem can be to plant more
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trees
and plants in the
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areas
surrounding the
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factories
and
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construction
sites. This is
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because
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trees
are natural filters that can
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help
in filtering out any harmful substances in the
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air
.
For example
, one of the most polluted nations in the world, China, has
considerably
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reduced
its
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air
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pollution
levels by using vertical gardens, which contain several plants to clean the air.

Secondly
, shifting of the
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factories
, and preparation of
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construction
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materials
away from the
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cities
and nearer to forests can be a viable solution.
Instead
of planting
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trees
in the
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cities
, which cannot accommodate adequate
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trees
, moving out the
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factories
to the
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areas
where
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trees
are
readily
available can be more useful.
For example
, several
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factories
in Hyderabad
were shifted
from
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cities
to rural
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areas
, which not
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only
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reduced
the
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pollution
level in the city,
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but
also
, had a negligible effect on the rural
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areas
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because
most of the
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pollution
was filtered
out by the
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trees
.
Furthermore
,
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governments
of
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developing countries
can impose quality restrictions on
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materials
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used
in
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factories
and
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construction
,
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so
that the polluting chemicals released from the
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cheap
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materials
can
be nullified
.

To conclude
, planting more
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trees
, moving the
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factories
out of the
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cities
, and ensuring that
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only
quality
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materials
are
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used
in these
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factories
can be the solutions to tackle the problem of
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reduced
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air
quality. In my view, it is the
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government
's responsibility to tackle this issue by considering
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some of the
above-mentioned suggestions.
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IELTS essay In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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