Needless to emphasize, in many cities around the world now it is a practice that both men and women started to work equally. A lion's share of society agues that house chore should be shared between them. I completely concur with this belief and the following sections of the essay will expand my reasons in support of this notion.
Indeed the group activity or shared work definitely would help the people to complete the task easily. Moreover, it would reduce the workload. For example, in a working family by both couples are doing their household works such as cooking, cleaning, gardening and so on would enhance the sense of caring as well as supportive mentality. Therefore the stress due to household chore could be reduced and the task would carry-out easily.
Yet another advantage of the shared work approach would help to save time. These days due to the tight work schedule both names and females might become tired after duty and not have enough time to do housing tasks. It is difficult for one person to carry out the whole chores. To illustrate, if one member of the family, especially women taking care of all works means she would definitely become late for next day duty. Since both couples are participating in completing housework would eliminate the time shortage. Therefore, they would not delay their job.
By dint of the aforementioned argument, I believe it is good to share all household tasks to reduce stress due to workload and to save time.
Needless to emphasize, in
many
cities around the world
now
it is a practice that both
men
and women
started
to
work
equally
. A lion's share of society
agues
that
house
chore should
be shared
between them. I completely concur with this belief and the following sections of the essay will expand my reasons in support of this notion.
Indeed
the group activity or shared
work
definitely would
help
the
people
to complete the
task
easily
.
Moreover
, it would
reduce
the workload.
For example
, in a working family by both couples are doing their household works such as cooking, cleaning, gardening and
so
on would enhance the sense of caring
as well
as supportive mentality.
Therefore
the
stress
due to household chore could be
reduced
and the
task
would carry-out
easily
.
Yet
another advantage of the shared
work
approach would
help
to save
time
. These days due to the tight
work
schedule both names and females might become tired after duty and not have
enough
time
to do housing
tasks
. It is difficult for one person to carry out the whole chores. To illustrate, if one member of the family,
especially
women taking care of all works means she would definitely become late for
next
day duty.
Since
both couples are participating in completing housework would eliminate the
time
shortage.
Therefore
, they would not delay their job.
By dint of the aforementioned argument, I believe it is
good
to share all household
tasks
to
reduce
stress
due to workload and to save
time
.
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