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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for men and women to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for men and women to share household tasks. v. 2
In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for men and women to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree? In most nations, an increasing number of couples have started working equally. Hence, it is natural that, they both share domestic chores among themselves. I strongly agree with the phenomenon above, as this way of living present several benefits, such as stress free life and courage to be self-dependent. Firstly, sharing domestic chores, mainly reduce the pressure on couples. If only one of them has to do all the work alone after long hours of office work, they will be under tremendous pressure. Eventually, the person who does all the work will have no option but to quit their job. Since this will help make time for household chores without much stress. However, this can bring about feelings of resentment. By contrast, sharing domestic works, enables both spouse to have a flourishing career and stress free family life. For instance, recent study reveals that, 60% of couples without pressure lives longer. Secondly, dividing household chores, help both men and women to be independent. This is because, each partner learn basic skills on how to do almost every work at home, and can run the house independently when the other is out of town. For example, business men and women benefit from this phenomenon because their job require them to travel frequently, leaving their families. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the opinion that, busy working couple should share their domestic duties because, it will help them reduce the workload and it associated pressure. Furthermore, it enables them to be independent when they are alone.
In
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countries,
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women
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men
are working full-time. It is
therefore
, logical for
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men
and
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women
to share household tasks. To what extent do you
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agree
or disagree?

In most nations, an increasing number of
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couples
have
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started
working
equally
.
Hence
, it is natural that, they both share
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domestic
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chores
among themselves. I
strongly
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agree
with the phenomenon above, as this way of living present several benefits, such as
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stress
free life and courage to be self-dependent.

Firstly
, sharing
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domestic
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chores
,
mainly
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reduce
the
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pressure
on
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couples
. If
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only
one of them
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has to
do all the
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work
alone after long hours of office
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work
, they will be under tremendous
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pressure
.
Eventually
, the person who does all the
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work
will have no option
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but
to quit their job. Since this will
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help
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make
time for household
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chores
without much
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stress
.
However
, this can bring about feelings of resentment. By contrast, sharing
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domestic
works, enables both spouse to have a flourishing career and
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stress
free family life.
For instance
, recent study reveals that, 60% of
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couples
without
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pressure
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lives
longer.

Secondly
, dividing household
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chores
,
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help
both
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men
and
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women
to be independent. This is
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because
, each partner learn basic
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skills
on how to do almost every
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work
at home, and can run the
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house
independently
when the other is out of town.
For example
, business
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men
and
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women
benefit from this phenomenon
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because
their job require them to travel
frequently
, leaving their families.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
with the opinion that, busy working
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couple
should share their
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domestic
duties
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because
, it will
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help
them
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reduce
the workload and it associated
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pressure
.
Furthermore
, it enables them to be independent when they are alone.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for men and women to share household tasks. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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