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In many countries, women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.4

In many countries, women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. v. 4
Nowadays, both genders do a full-time job. Hence, it is believed that they should contribute equally in the daily household work. I completely agree with this viewpoint, as this would decrease the burden on an individual. In my opinion, due to financial constraints and inflation, it has now become a necessity that both men and women now do a permanent job. This has changed the home dynamics completely. Earlier female counterpart of the families were responsible in taking care of the home, but now men are expected to equally contribute. Therefore, it would result in less work load on any one person and hence, result in better management of the home. For example, if women take the responsibility of cooking, then men can help in cleaning or washing or vice versa. Moreover, working together in harmony would result in better family dynamics and increased understanding among the family members. As a result, everyone in the family would be able to understand and respect the other persons’ job. In addition, it would also help everyone to focus on their career equally. This would result in more productivity both on the job and in daily household chore, making the working and home environment happier. An added benefit would be decreased mental stress and healthy mindset. To conclude, I strongly recommend and believe that both genders should divide the household chores without any discrimination as it would prevent the burnout of either individual and promote harmony in the family.
Nowadays, both genders do a full-time
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job
.
Hence
, it
is believed
that they should contribute
equally
in the daily household work. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this viewpoint, as this would decrease the burden on an individual.

In my opinion, due to financial constraints and inflation, it has
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now
become a necessity that both
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men
and women
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
do a permanent
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job
. This has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
the home dynamics completely. Earlier female counterpart of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
were responsible in taking care of the home,
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but
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now
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men
are
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expected
to
equally
contribute.
Therefore
, it would
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result
in less work load on any one person and
hence
,
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result
in better management of the home.
For example
, if women take the responsibility of cooking, then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in cleaning or washing or vice versa.

Moreover
, working together in harmony would
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result
in better
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family
dynamics and increased understanding among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members. As a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
result
, everyone in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
would be able to understand and respect the other persons’
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
.
In addition
, it would
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
everyone to focus on their career
equally
. This would
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
result
in more productivity both on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
and in daily household chore, making the working and home environment happier. An
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
benefit would
be decreased
mental
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and healthy mindset.

To conclude
, I
strongly
recommend and believe that both genders should divide the household chores without any discrimination as it would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the burnout of either individual and promote harmony in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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