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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is, therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.8

In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is, therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. v. 8
Most of the growing industries in the world are becoming equal opportunity employers, resulting in more working women than before. In many countries, it seems logical for men and women to divide the household works as they both work full-time. This essay will discuss why I completely agree with this statement. The workload of the people is the main contributor towards their increasing stress levels. A woman being a full-time employee and solely responsible for her household makes it difficult for her to cope with her daily routine. To lower the workload of the women, the husband and wife should equally participate in executing household works. A recent survey conducted by BBC London showed that women who work as full-time employee and solely look after their household tend to be 36% more aggressive than normal women employees. It is, therefore, recommended for couples to mutually perform household tasks because this induces the sense of responsibility and enhances the bonding among the couple. It is important to maintain and take care of every house you are living in. A woman may not be able to keep an eye for everything in her house if she is also a full-time employee. Being tired after getting off from the job every day is a common phenomenon, due to which, women find it very difficult to execute every aspect of household work alone. This makes the household works remain unfinished every day, resulting in high maintenance costs of the house after every few years. To summarize, the men and women should equally participate in sharing household tasks because it is beneficial for the household as it is well taken care of, and sharing tasks also help to maintain the stress levels of men and women, ultimately making a relationship stronger.
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women
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before
. In
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many
countries, it seems logical for
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men
and
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women
to divide the
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household
works as they both
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work
full-time. This essay will discuss why I completely
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agree
with this statement.

The workload of the
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people
is the main contributor towards their increasing
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stress
levels. A woman being a full-time
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employee
and
solely
responsible for her
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household
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makes
it difficult for her to cope with her daily routine. To lower the workload of the
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women
, the husband and wife should
equally
participate in executing
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household
works. A recent survey conducted by BBC London
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showed
that
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women
who
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work
as full-time
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employee
and
solely
look after their
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household
tend to be 36% more aggressive than normal
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women
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employees
. It is,
therefore
, recommended for couples to
mutually
perform
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household
tasks
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because
this induces the sense of responsibility and enhances the bonding among the couple.

It is
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important
to maintain and take care of every
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house
you are living in. A woman may not be able to
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keep
an eye for everything in her
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house
if she is
also
a full-time
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employee
.
Being tired
after getting off from the job every day is a common phenomenon, due to which,
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women
find it
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very
difficult to execute every aspect of
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household
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work
alone. This
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makes
the
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household
works remain unfinished every day, resulting in high maintenance costs of the
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house
after every few years.

To summarize
, the
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men
and
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women
should
equally
participate in sharing
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household
tasks
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because
it is beneficial for the
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household
as it is well taken care of, and sharing tasks
also
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help
to maintain the
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stress
levels of
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men
and
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women
,
ultimately
making a relationship stronger.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is, therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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