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In many countries woman no longer feel the need to get married. some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require financial security that marriage can bring to what extent do you agree? v.1

In many countries woman no longer feel the need to get married. some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require financial security that marriage can bring v. 1
Dear Mr Jenkins, I am writing to you regarding the upcoming trip to Paris for which you are looking for people to accompany the children. I would be delighted to join the trip and to help out. I can help out during this time because I am currently off work for a few months and I would like to find something to fill up my free time, and this would be perfect. As you will know, I have helped the school out on a variety of events, such as in the institute sports day last summer and also at the jumble sale just a few months ago, and I thoroughly enjoyed being of assistance. There are a number of things I could do to help out. I can come early in the morning to the faculty before we leave and make sure everybody is accounted for and on the bus. But of particular relevance is the fact that I can speak French and I know Paris quite well, so I will be able to assist with the day-to-day practicalities of moving the children around and going to the museums and other attractions that we will visit. There are, though, some things I would still like to know about and to clarify. Do you have an itinerary you can send me so I know what we are going to see whilst there? This will be useful as I can then prepare myself with some background reading. I also wondered what time exactly are you due to arrive back in the UK at the university? I have an event in the evening of the 15th when we are due to come back. Although I can miss it, I would like to let them know in advance if this will be the case. Thank you for considering my offer and I look forward to hearing from you, Yours sincerely
Dear Mr Jenkins,

I am writing to you regarding the upcoming trip to Paris for which you are looking for
people
to accompany the children.

I would
be delighted
to
join
the trip and to
help
out.
I
can
help
out during this time
because
I am
currently
off work for a few months and I would like to find something to fill up my free time, and this would be perfect. As you will
know
, I have
helped
the school out on a variety of
events
, such as in the institute sports day last summer and
also
at the jumble sale
just
a few months ago, and I
thoroughly
enjoyed being of assistance.

There are a number of things I could do to
help
out. I can
come
early in the morning to the faculty
before
we
leave
and
make
sure everybody
is accounted
for and on the bus.
But
of particular relevance is the fact that I can speak French and I
know
Paris quite well,
so
I will be able to assist with the day-to-day practicalities of moving the children around and going to the museums and other attractions that we will visit.

There are, though,
some
things I would
still
like to
know
about and to clarify. Do you have an itinerary you can
send
me
so
I
know
what we are going to
see
whilst there? This will be useful as I can then prepare myself with
some
background reading. I
also
wondered what time exactly are you due to arrive back in the UK at the university? I have an
event
in the evening of the 15th when we are due to
come
back. Although I can miss it, I would like to
let
them
know
in advance if this will be the case.

Thank you for considering my offer and I look forward to hearing from you,

Yours
sincerely
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IELTS essay In many countries woman no longer feel the need to get married. some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require financial security that marriage can bring v. 1

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  American English
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315 words
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