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When a student engages in disruptive behavior in the classroom, it negatively impacts on both the teacher’s ability to teach and other students’ ability to learn. One way a teacher can correct disruptive behavior is by questioning awareness of effect. v.1

When a student engages in disruptive behavior in the classroom, it negatively impacts on both the teacher’s ability to teach and other students’ ability to learn. One way a teacher can correct disruptive behavior is by questioning awareness of effect. v. 1
Certain people think that rap paved path for meeting different people with various traditions, irrespective of the age because singing is the most common interest or hobby that most of the individuals have. I totally agree with the point that people with common interests can have a great time together when compared to opposite minded people. This essay will discuss firstly, how people spend time when they have the same interest like music and secondly, how music helps people socialize, followed by a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, people are more enthusiastic to spend most of their time with like-minded people, who has the same interests or hobby. Furthermore, such people can exchange their views and ideas with each other and can have a good time discussing about their favourite stars and Zoner. For instance, there are sunburn festivals, especially for music lovers with pop-singers and musicians who performs in different parts of the world irrespective of language and culture. People who are fascinated about music travels to a different country, if their favourite band is playing and moreover, music does not have any age limit, it is meant for all the age groups. Also, such people have few social groups in social media like Facebook, where people from different areas and language can join and share their views. Furthermore, some people form a group with music as a passion and soon become local bands with effort and hard work, while people with same hobby can have social gathering when the band is playing, so that everyone can have a good time together after a long hectic day. Nowadays, many cafe's and pubs are encouraging live music by local bands because of the overwhelming response by the customers towards the bands and few people are crazy to attend when their favourite team is singing. In my opinion, it is proven fact that people with the same hobby like music, dance can share good views and thoughts whenever they find time to do so. In conclusion, people say music does not have language and is widely understood by everyone irrespective of gender, age and culture and hence can socialize people with the same interest at different platforms.
Certain
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people
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think
that rap paved path for meeting
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different
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people
with various traditions, irrespective of the
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age
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because
singing is the most common
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interest
or
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hobby
that most of the individuals have. I
totally
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agree
with the point that
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people
with common
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interests
can have a great
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time
together when compared to opposite minded
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people
. This essay will discuss
firstly
, how
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people
spend
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time
when they have the same
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interest
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like
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music
and
secondly
, how
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music
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helps
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people
socialize, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

On the one hand,
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people
are more enthusiastic to spend most of their
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time
with like-minded
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people
, who has the same
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interests
or
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hobby
.
Furthermore
, such
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people
can exchange their views and
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ideas
with each other and can have a
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good
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time
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discussing about their
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favourite
stars and Zoner.
For instance
, there are sunburn festivals,
especially
for
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music
lovers with pop-singers and musicians who
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performs
in
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different
parts of the world irrespective of language and culture.
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who
are fascinated
about
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music
travels to a
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different
country, if their
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favourite
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band
is playing and
moreover
,
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music
does not have any
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age
limit, it
is meant
for all the
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age
groups.
Also
, such
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people
have few social groups in social media like Facebook, where
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people
from
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different
areas and language can
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join
and share their views.

Furthermore
,
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some
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people
form a group with
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music
as a passion and
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soon
become local
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bands
with effort and
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hard
work, while
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people
with same
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hobby
can have social gathering when the
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band
is playing,
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so
that everyone can have a
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good
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time
together after a long hectic day. Nowadays,
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many
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cafe
's and pubs are encouraging
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live
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music
by local
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bands
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because
of the overwhelming response by the customers towards the
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bands
and few
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people
are crazy to attend when their
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favourite
team is singing. In my opinion, it
is proven
fact that
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people
with the same
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hobby
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like
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music
, dance can share
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good
views and thoughts whenever they find
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time
to do
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so
.

In conclusion
,
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people
say
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music
does not have language and is
widely
understood by everyone irrespective of gender,
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age
and culture and
hence
can socialize
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people
with the same
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interest
at
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different
platforms.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay When a student engages in disruptive behavior in the classroom, it negatively impacts on both the teacher’s ability to teach and other students’ ability to learn. One way a teacher can correct disruptive behavior is by questioning awareness of effect. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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