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In many countries traditional food is replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion. v.2

In many countries traditional food is replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Give your opinion. v. 2
People divide into tow campuses about the shopping online' benefits. While people, proponents, Say that shopping online provides an abundant option for consumers and save their time, opponents of this idea claim that the online shopping increase marketing cheating. It seems to my thinking way that the commercial trade, alternative method, helps the buyer to compare between different brands and save their time and money. Firstly, people using the internet to shop have various options in order to compare and get a best deal. If you go to specific mall, you will have limited options. Even though this market is a large, it cannot provide for you everything. Moreover, the price in market place logical will be higher than commercial sites, because this traditional market place should buy for rent, electricity, water, parkings bills. In contrast, if you shopping online, you will find the bulk of of products with lower price, because the commercial trader just pays for an internet domain, price under 20 dollars per year. Secondly, it can be deniable that some shopping online inherent risk. The proponents say that if you were shopping online, no one would guarantee that you will get your order. Additionally, they say that maybe you got your order, but it maybe would come with different size and bad quality. However, it needlessly advice that people should shop from authentic commercial websites in order to protect their self. Second criticism says there a lot of cyber attacks trying stolen the consumers' information. This flawed in commercial trade, but the consumers can avoid this if he uses a credit card. In conclusion, I adamantly support people to shop online because they will can save their money and comparison different items in a few minutes. Moreover, there are some criticisms about their quality and privacy in online shopping, but these could avoidable. If people visit famous websites providing high security system, and using a prepaid band card instead of a debate card.
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provides an abundant option for consumers and save their time, opponents of this
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claim that the
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increase marketing cheating. It seems to my thinking way that the
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commercial
trade, alternative method,
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helps
the buyer to compare between
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different
brands and save their time and money.

Firstly
,
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people
using the internet to shop have various options in
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order
to compare and
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get
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a
best deal. If you go to specific mall, you will have limited options.
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this market is a large, it cannot provide for you everything.
Moreover
, the price in market place logical will be higher than
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commercial
sites,
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because
this traditional market place should
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buy
for rent, electricity, water,
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parkings
bills.
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, if you
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online
, you will find the bulk
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products with lower price,
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trader
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Secondly
, it can be deniable that
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inherent
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. The proponents say that if you were
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, no one would guarantee that you will
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your
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.
Additionally
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,
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come
with
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different
size and
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bad
quality.
However
, it
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advice that
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people
should shop from authentic
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commercial
websites in
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to protect their self. Second criticism says there
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cyber attacks
trying stolen the consumers' information. This flawed in
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commercial
trade,
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the consumers can avoid this if he
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In conclusion
, I
adamantly
support
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people
to shop
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will can
save their money and comparison
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different
items in a few minutes.
Moreover
, there are
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criticisms about their quality and privacy in
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online
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,
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these
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could avoidable
. If
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people
visit
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websites providing high security system, and using a prepaid band card
instead
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries traditional food is replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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