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In many countries traditional foods are replaced by international fast foods. This is having negative effects on families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

In many countries traditional foods are replaced by international fast foods. This is having negative effects on families and societies. v. 1
The eating habits of people have changed over the past few years. A lot of individuals are now drawn to fast foods which is quickly and easily accessible in many countries. I completely agree that such trend brings in a lot of drawbacks for families and societies to suffer. Quality time with family of an individual goes for a toss, along with threat to local businesses serving regional cuisines. Spending leisure time with family is essential for one to balance personal and professional lives. One of the oldest tradition people have followed is to have a meal together with family. However, due to the competitive environment around us, people spend more hours at work and rely on quick snack for their hunger. People get less chance to cook special dishes for their loved ones. People are deprived of sharing some light moments with family that can be cherished during dinner. For instance, 28% of professionals working in New York are dependent on burgers and sandwiches in dinner, as they work overtime, which in turn reduces time with their families. Therefore, introduction of fast foods has made humans completely dependent on them, in order to achieve work life balance, keeping their family time at stake. Food remains one of the distinct identity of a country's culture and history. Rise of fast food chains has restricted local businesses to flourish. People are encouraged to consume fast food, neglecting the staple food of the region. Meals representing a specific culture are lost due to the availability of foreign main course. Daily consumption of such meals makes an individual ill, which on a large scale affects the society and the local economy. For example, a lot of foreign restaurants are setting up in Italy to cater the needs of tourists, which reduces business of local entrepreneurs selling authentic Italian cuisine. Hence, society is impacted monetarily as well as emotionally due to rise in foreign chains in their home country. To conclude, availability of quick meals has deprived man of spending some quality time with his family and home cooked food. Not only, revenue of local businesses reduce on a large scale, but also a cultural heritage of local foods is disappearing.
The eating habits of
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changed
over the past few years.
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individuals are
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now
drawn to
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fast
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foods
which is
quickly
and
easily
accessible in
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many
countries. I completely
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agree
that such trend brings in
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a lot of
drawbacks for
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families
and societies to suffer. Quality
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time
with
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family
of an individual goes for a toss, along with threat to
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local
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businesses
serving regional cuisines.

Spending leisure
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time
with
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family
is essential for one to balance personal and professional
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lives
. One of the oldest tradition
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people
have followed is to have a
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meal
together with
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family
.
However
, due to the competitive environment around us,
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people
spend more hours at work and rely on quick snack for their hunger.
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People
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get
less chance to cook special dishes for their
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loved
ones.
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People
are deprived
of sharing
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some
light moments with
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family
that can
be cherished
during dinner.
For instance
, 28% of professionals working in New York are dependent on burgers and sandwiches in dinner, as they work overtime, which in turn
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reduces
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time
with their
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families
.
Therefore
, introduction of
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fast
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foods
has made humans completely dependent on them, in order to achieve
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work life
balance, keeping their
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family
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time
at stake.

Food remains one of the distinct identity of a country's culture and history. Rise of
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fast
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food
chains has restricted
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local
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businesses
to flourish.
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People
are encouraged
to consume
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fast
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food
, neglecting the staple
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food
of the region.
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Meals
representing a specific culture
are lost
due to the availability of foreign main course. Daily consumption of such
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meals
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makes
an individual ill, which on a large scale affects the society and the
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local
economy.
For example
,
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a lot of
foreign restaurants are setting up in Italy to cater the needs of tourists, which
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reduces
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business
of
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local
entrepreneurs selling authentic Italian cuisine.
Hence
, society
is impacted
monetarily
as well
as
emotionally
due to rise in foreign chains in their home country.

To conclude
, availability of quick
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meals
has deprived
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man
of spending
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some
quality
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time
with his
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family
and home cooked
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food
. Not
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only
, revenue of
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local
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businesses
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reduce
on a large scale,
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but
also
a cultural heritage of
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local
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foods
is disappearing.
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IELTS essay In many countries traditional foods are replaced by international fast foods. This is having negative effects on families and societies. v. 1

Essay
  American English
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367 words
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