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In many countries television shows many foreign -made programmes. The dominance to the imported entertainment is harmful to the culture of these countries. To what extend do you agree or disagree. v.2

The programs telecasted in television that are made abroad, are becoming more and more popular nowadays. This type of entertainment expressing foreign cultures leads to the extinction of local culture. In my opinion, these imported shows have had adverse impacts on culture and this essay will discuss the argument in detail. Firstly, imported programs are enriched with the culture of the country that are created from. As such depiction persuades the viewers to adopt the foreign culture, most of them started to behave in a way that is shown in those shows. For example, change in the dressing sense, especially in modern India, people prefer wearing western clothes to the traditional dresses. Hence, the habit of traditional dressing is slowly vanishing from common usage, primarily due to the attraction from the western shows. Secondly, invasion of foreign programs deter the growth of local shows. With the high-quality production, viewers are interested in watching programs that are imported neglecting their own country productions. This results in the poor development of locally produced shows which are used to enhance native culture. If native programs promoting their own culture were telecasted, people would watch and learn to follow their culture and eventually preserving innate culture. Critics would claim that these invaded programs pave the way to globalization. This might be true to some extent, however, I argue that cultural diversity will be spoilt. For instance, people from various countries would adapt to single cultured living unless this intrusion is restricted in television programs. In conclusion, I believe that imported shows should be given less importance, and by prohibiting the exposure of foreign culture in those particular shows, people will consider them as a purely entertaining object. Thus, one’s culture exploited by foreign originated programs must be controlled.
The
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programs
telecasted in television that
are made
abroad, are becoming more and more popular nowadays. This type of entertainment expressing
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foreign
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cultures
leads to the extinction of local
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culture
. In my opinion, these
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imported
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shows
have had adverse impacts on
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culture
and this essay will discuss the argument in detail.

Firstly
,
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imported
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programs
are enriched
with the
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culture
of the country that
are created
from. As such depiction persuades the viewers to adopt the
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foreign
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culture
, most of them
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started
to behave in a way that
is shown
in those
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shows
.
For example
,
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change
in the dressing sense,
especially
in modern India,
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people
prefer wearing western clothes to the traditional dresses.
Hence
, the habit of traditional dressing is
slowly
vanishing from common usage,
primarily
due to the attraction from the western
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shows
.

Secondly
, invasion of
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foreign
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programs
deter the growth of local
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shows
. With the high-quality production, viewers
are interested
in watching
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programs
that are
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imported
neglecting their
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own
country productions. This results in the poor development of
locally
produced
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shows
which are
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used
to enhance native
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culture
. If native
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programs
promoting their
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own
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culture
were telecasted
,
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people
would
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watch
and learn to follow their
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culture
and
eventually
preserving innate culture.

Critics would claim that these invaded
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programs
pave the way to globalization. This might be true to
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some
extent,
however
, I argue that cultural diversity will be
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spoilt
.
For instance
,
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people
from various countries would adapt to single cultured living unless this intrusion
is restricted
in television programs.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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imported
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shows
should be
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given
less importance, and by prohibiting the exposure of
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foreign
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culture
in those particular
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shows
,
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people
will consider them as a
purely
entertaining object.
Thus
, one’s
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culture
exploited by
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foreign
originated
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programs
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must
be controlled
.
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IELTS essay In many countries television shows many foreign-made programmes. The dominance of imported entertainment is harmful to the cultures of these countries.

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