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In many countries, people like to eat a variety of imported food rather than the local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

In many countries, people like to eat a variety of imported food rather than the local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
There are heaps of food brought into people’s lives. Imported food now play a vital role in people’s diet and not the domestic food in many countries. Despite that the food from other countries is much popular for some people recently, there is no doubt that the local food should be valued as much as possible. Obviously, local food is a suitable choice for people’s eating habits and customs. Eating too much imported food might lead to our health problems. The structure of our body systems is designed to adapt the traditional way of eating. Some people when they eat these food such as cheese would have a digestion disease more easily than people who are accustomed to them. Furthermore, imported food is a shock to the local eating customs. We could understand local customs and practices from these food materials and cuisines, which are carrying out from generations to generations. The less people support the local food, the less traditions could save in our memories. However, people should enjoy the right of one of the benefits of globalization—imported food. But it is certainly true that the tariffs as well as the cost of transportation and fabrication must be part of their prices, only a few people could afford them as a regular food in their lives. As a result, it would cause higher imbalance in consumption and the gap between rich and poor. In conclusion, it is not a good trend that people enjoy the imported food more than local food. Although imported food could give us a chance of cross-cultural communication, we should advocate traditional and equal lifestyle by local food.
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food
brought into
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people’s
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lives
.
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Imported
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food
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now
play a vital role in
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people’s
diet and not the domestic
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food
in
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many
countries. Despite that the
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food
from other countries is much popular for
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some
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people
recently, there is no doubt that the
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local
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food
should
be valued
as much as possible.

Obviously
,
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local
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food
is a suitable choice for
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people’s
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eating
habits and customs.
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Eating
too much
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imported
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food
might lead to our health problems. The structure of our body systems
is designed
to adapt the traditional way of
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eating
.
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Some
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people
when they eat these
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food
such as cheese would have a digestion disease more
easily
than
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people
who
are accustomed
to them.
Furthermore
,
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imported
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food
is a shock to the
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local
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eating
customs. We could understand
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local
customs and practices from these
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food
materials and cuisines, which are carrying out from generations to generations. The
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less
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people
support the
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local
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food
, the
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less
traditions could save in our memories.

However
,
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people
should enjoy the right of one of the benefits of globalization—imported
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food
.
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it is
certainly
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as the cost of transportation and fabrication
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must
be part of their prices,
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only
a few
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people
could afford them as a regular
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food
in their
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lives
.
As a result
, it would cause higher imbalance in consumption and the gap between rich and poor.

In conclusion
, it is not a
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good
trend that
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people
enjoy the
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imported
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food
more than
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local
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food
. Although
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imported
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food
could give us a chance of cross-cultural communication, we should advocate traditional and equal lifestyle by
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local
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food
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, people like to eat a variety of imported food rather than the local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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