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PTE essay It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

PTE essay It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice v. 2
Some people argue that it is not a wise decision of getting married before graduating from school or having a job. I completely agree with this opinion as I believe there are several drawbacks of these marriages. On the one hand, people who are not finishing school are normally not mature, and therefore they are not ready for marriage. Marriage comes with huge responsibilities and ones need to fully prepare for all the challenges associated with it. Young people, who are still in school, are not mentally and emotionally fit to face such a difficulty of the relationship. For example, they need to completely change from their easy lifestyle to adapt to their new family life with rules and duties. This can be very hard and stressful for them, particularly when they have children. As a result, the divorce rate in young marriage couples is high. On the other hand, there are many financial problems for the individuals who marry without having a secured job. The cost of living today is high and it is a huge problem for young couples living with low paid temporary or part-time jobs. It is extremely hard for them to support their household’s daily expenditure and this results in poor living quality. They, for example, cannot afford a good health care system, and advanced entertainment and sports facilities, and must live in small and remote flats. Life becomes very depression and frustration. Furthermore, they cannot dedicate their time to learning and improving their professional skills and, in today’s competitive job market, this consequently leads to a low job prospect which has negative impacts in their future. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with getting married before securing a job or finishing school.
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Some
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people
argue that it is not a wise decision of getting married
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before
graduating from
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school
or having a
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job
. I completely
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agree
with this opinion as I believe there are several drawbacks of these marriages.

On the one hand,
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people
who are not finishing
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school
are
normally
not mature, and
therefore
they are not ready for marriage. Marriage
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comes
with huge responsibilities and ones need to
fully
prepare for all the challenges associated with it. Young
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people
, who are
still
in
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school
, are not mentally and
emotionally
fit to face such a difficulty of the relationship.
For example
, they need to completely
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change
from their easy lifestyle to adapt to their new family life with
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rules
and duties. This can be
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very
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hard
and stressful for them,
particularly
when they have children.
As a result
, the divorce rate in young marriage couples is high.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
financial problems for the individuals who marry without having a secured
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job
. The cost of living
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today
is high and it is a huge problem for young couples living with low paid temporary or part-time
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jobs
. It is
extremely
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hard
for them to support their household’s daily expenditure and this results in poor living quality. They,
for example
, cannot afford a
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good
health care system, and advanced entertainment and sports facilities, and
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must
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live
in
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small
and remote flats. Life becomes
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very
depression and frustration.
Furthermore
, they cannot dedicate their time to learning and improving their professional
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skills
and, in
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today
’s competitive
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job
market, this
consequently
leads to a low
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job
prospect which has
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negative
impacts in their future.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
disagree with getting married
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before
securing a
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job
or finishing
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school
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay PTE essay It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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