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Children nowadays watch significantly now television than in the past which reduces their activity levels accordingly Why is this the case What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children v.1

Children nowadays watch significantly now television than in the past which reduces their activity levels accordingly Why is this the case What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children v. 1
Parenting is one of the significant matter and therefore every single step taken have a huge impact on the child's personality development. Engaging children in simple household works and involving them in the same under parent's guidance is something that should be encouraged. This essay will be discussing the reasons for agreeing why children should be involved in household tasks. First and foremost engaging children in ordinary works or at least making them to watch the parent working will definitely helps in developing an interest towards household works and, soon it will be easy for them to work at home too. For example, some children have an attitude that doing everyday works is of low profile and it should be done by the maids and helpers. This kind of wrong impact can be rectified and a positive attitude can be cultivated in the early stage itself if we could engage them in various simple household activities. Another reason would be that a family works together stands together. Children working or helping their family are more likely to have more attachment to the family. Spending more time with the family will certainly contribute to sharing their happiness and sorrows together. For example, like these practices at home will generate a positive, friendly atmosphere at home, and this will help children to be frank to their parents and this will halt many possible dangers of adolescence. In conclusion, children should help their parents in all possible ways since it has many positive impacts on the children as well as for the parents. For the well being of the family and society, small acts like this contributes a lot and that should be encouraged.
Parenting is one of the significant matter and
therefore
every single step taken have a huge impact on the child's personality development. Engaging
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children
in simple
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household
works and involving them in the same under parent's guidance is something that should
be encouraged
. This essay will be discussing the reasons for agreeing why
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children
should
be involved
in
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household
tasks.

First
and foremost engaging
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children
in ordinary works or at least making them to
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watch
the
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parent
working will definitely
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helps
in developing an interest towards
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household
works and,
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soon
it will be easy for them to
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work
at home too.
For example
,
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some
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children
have an attitude that doing everyday works is of low profile and it should
be done
by the maids and helpers. This kind of
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wrong
impact can
be rectified
and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
attitude can
be cultivated
in the early stage itself if we could engage them in various simple
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household
activities.

Another reason would be that a
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family
works
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together stands together
.
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Children
working or helping their
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family
are more likely to have more attachment to the
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family
. Spending more time with the
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family
will
certainly
contribute to sharing their happiness and sorrows together.
For example
, like these practices at home will generate a
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positive
, friendly atmosphere at home, and this will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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children
to be frank to their
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parents
and this will halt
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many
possible
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dangers
of adolescence.

In conclusion
,
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children
should
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help
their
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parents
in all possible ways since it has
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many
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positive
impacts on the
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children
as well
as for the
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parents
. For the
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well being
of the
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family
and society,
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small
acts like this contributes a lot and that should
be encouraged
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Children nowadays watch significantly now television than in the past which reduces their activity levels accordingly Why is this the case What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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