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In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v.2

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v. 2
When it comes to food there are many options to choose from and they have a vast inclination towards the consumption of food from other countries. However, majority of the people tend to opt for food that is exported from other areas than buying the food that is processed locally. Certainly there are many driving forces behind this some of them are curious to try out international cuisines and affordable cost. There are many things that can be done to promote the locally produced food items such as eliminating food taxes and organizing competitions to promote chemical free local items. The essay will discuss the forth points said. With regards to the internationally processed food, there are many reasons why people tend to buy these food items. Firstly, due to the curiosity of trying out food from foreign land, people tends to get into the venture of buying it. For instance the delicacies from china, Italy and other countries are much prominently and easily available all over the world. Secondly the international food items are easily available in nearby supermarkets and also at very affordable rates. Hence, due to easy availability and reduced rates people tend to buy these products more. In order to increase the consumption of locally produced food items, the government can reduce the taxes and local charges applied to the local food items. According to a survey, because of reduced taxes there was an increase of 8% in the goods and items of local companies. Furthermore, instead of having long lasting preserved food, which might contain added preservatives, people could be encouraged to consume healthy and fresh food which contain less chemicals produced by local vendors. Consequently the consumption of local food will increase. To conclude, the people are interested in trying out the continental food because of the easy availability and less cost. Although by reducing food related taxes and other taxes on items plus spreading awareness regarding the healthy food intake can increase the sales of local food companies.
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food
there are
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many
options to choose
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from and
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food
from
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other
countries.
However
,
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majority of
the
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people
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tend
to opt for
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food
that
is exported
from
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other
areas than buying the
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food
that
is processed
locally
.
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there are
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many
driving forces behind this
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some
of them are curious to try out international cuisines and affordable cost. There are
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many
things that can
be done
to promote the
locally
produced
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food
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items
such as eliminating
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food
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taxes
and organizing competitions to promote chemical free
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local
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items
. The essay will discuss the forth points said.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
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the
internationally
processed
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food
, there are
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many
reasons why
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people
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tend
to
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buy
these
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food
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items
.
Firstly
, due to the curiosity of trying out
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food
from foreign land,
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people
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tends
to
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get
into the venture of buying it.
For instance
the delicacies from
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china
, Italy and
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other
countries are much
prominently
and
easily
available all over the world.
Secondly
the international
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food
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items
are
easily
available in nearby supermarkets and
also
at
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very
affordable rates.
Hence
, due to easy availability and
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reduced
rates
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people
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tend
to
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buy
these products more.

In order to increase the consumption of
locally
produced
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food
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items
, the
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government
can
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reduce
the
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taxes
and
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local
charges applied to the
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local
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food
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items
. According to a survey,
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because
of
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reduced
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taxes
there was an increase of 8% in the
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goods
and
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items
of
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local
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companies
.
Furthermore
,
instead
of having
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long lasting
preserved
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food
, which might contain
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added
preservatives,
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people
could
be encouraged
to consume healthy and fresh
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food
which contain
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less
chemicals produced by
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local
vendors.
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Consequently
the consumption of
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local
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food
will increase.

To conclude
, the
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people
are interested
in trying out the continental
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food
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because
of the easy availability and less cost. Although by reducing
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food
related
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taxes
and
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other
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taxes
on
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items
plus spreading awareness regarding the healthy
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food
intake can increase the sales of
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local
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food
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companies
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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