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In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v.3

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v. 3
In several nations, the preference of individuals is rapidly reclining towards foreign food rather than grown by the local farmers. While intensive marketing is attracting people to these eatables, local authorities should emphasize their people to understand the consequences of this progress. It cannot be denied that as the population is increasing nutritious food has become a major industry. Even though, most of the nation has ample home grown grains, rice, etc. , their people get trapped into the promotion of numerous foreign organizations and invest their hard earned money in those products. Neither these packed foods have health benefits as local fresh vegetables nor they are cheaper. For example, according to a survey, foreign food market in India has grown by 35% from 2% in the year 2002. Although, India is an agricultural rich country, but their citizens are relying on promotions of companies instead of the government guidelines. There is a host of practices that government can implement to counter this situation, but they should support their farmers in the first place and then work on other measures. If local farmers have the support from authorities, they can increase their share in the food market. Not only this trend will improve the local people wealth, it will also become a milestone to reduce a nation's dependency over foreign agriculture. For instance, USA has provided a 100 % subsidy to their farmers since 1973, this aid made them entirely independent in terms of food and now they are exporting it as well. As a result, prohibiting foreign is not a solution, governments need to develop their markets to attract people to the local food. To conclude, the aforementioned points make it evident that however, people are biased towards brands and opting for foreign nutritions, if authorities back their farmers they can mitigate this attraction.
In several nations, the preference of individuals is
rapidly
reclining towards
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foreign
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food
rather
than grown by the
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local
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farmers
. While intensive marketing is attracting
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people
to these eatables,
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local
authorities should emphasize their
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people
to understand the consequences of this progress.

It cannot
be denied
that as the population is increasing nutritious
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food
has become a major industry.
Even though
, most of the nation has ample
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home grown
grains, rice, etc.
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,
their
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people
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get
trapped into the promotion of numerous
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foreign
organizations and invest their
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hard earned
money in those products. Neither these packed
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foods
have health benefits as
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local
fresh
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vegetables nor
they are cheaper.
For example
, according to a survey,
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foreign
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food
market in India has grown by 35% from 2% in the year 2002. Although, India is an agricultural rich country,
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but
their citizens are relying on promotions of
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companies
instead
of the
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government
guidelines.

There is a host of practices that
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government
can implement to counter this situation,
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but
they should support their
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farmers
in the
first
place and then work on other measures. If
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local
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farmers
have the support from authorities, they can increase their share in the
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food
market. Not
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only
this trend will
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improve
the
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local
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people
wealth, it will
also
become a milestone to
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reduce
a nation's dependency over
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foreign
agriculture.
For instance
, USA has provided a 100 % subsidy to their
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farmers
since 1973, this aid made them
entirely
independent in terms of
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food
and
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now
they are exporting it
as well
.
As a result
, prohibiting
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foreign
is not a solution,
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governments
need to develop their markets to attract
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people
to the
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local
food.

To conclude
, the aforementioned points
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make
it evident that
however
,
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people
are biased
towards brands and opting for
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foreign
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nutritions
, if authorities back their
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farmers
they can mitigate this attraction.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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