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In many countries, life expectancy is increasing, thereby forcing people to work hard for their retirement benefits. There is an alternative option saying that people should be working earlier in their younger years. Is this a positive or negative develop v.1

In many countries, life expectancy is increasing, thereby forcing people to work hard for their retirement benefits. There is an alternative option saying that people should be working earlier in their younger years. Is this a positive or negative develop v. 1
It has been seen that garbage is increasing with the progress of time. This essay will explain the industrial revolution as the main cause of this crucial problem and then outline how introducing a new technical device can reduce this matter. One of the main reasons for the excess amount of rubbish is the increase in production. It is observed that with the advancement of technology, new products are continuously producing. These goods come out in the market with updated qualities and features, which easily allure people to purchase more. Even if some people buy equipment just to get a new one, which actually they do not need. Thus, the growth of manufacturing enhancing the consumption pattern. As a result, trash is stored in the environment from the used goods, scraps, packaging and industrial waste. For example, the recent survey conducted by the UNEP reveals that 70% of the waste in the environment is created by the industries. However, the government can ameliorate this situation by introducing a waste recycling plant. It would be more effective if the authorities of the nation establish a strict law to must use such machines by the manufacturing companies. The companies can use these machines to recycle scraps as well as used items to produce new one or destroy them. Therefore, using such trash processor not only will reduce the amount of rubbish in the environment, but also generate profit for the companies. For instance, the production of rubbish has declined drastically in Bangladesh after enforcing the law by the government to big business organizations for installing garbage management machines in the factories. In conclusion, the gradual invention is one of the major causes of the extra amount of rubbish creation. Nevertheless, this issue can be mitigated by the national authorities by installing plants for waste management.
It has been
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seen
that garbage is increasing with the progress of time. This essay will
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explain
the industrial revolution as the main cause of this crucial problem and then outline how introducing a
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new
technical device can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
this matter.

One of the main reasons for the excess amount of
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rubbish
is the increase in production. It
is observed
that with the advancement of technology,
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new
products are
continuously
producing. These
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goods
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come
out in the market with updated qualities and features, which
easily
allure
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people
to
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purchase
more. Even if
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some
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people
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buy
equipment
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just
to
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get
a
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new
one, which actually they do not need.
Thus
, the growth of manufacturing enhancing the consumption pattern.
As a result
, trash
is stored
in the environment from the
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used
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goods
, scraps, packaging and industrial
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waste
.
For example
, the recent survey conducted by the
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UNEP
reveals that 70% of the
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waste
in the environment
is created
by the industries.

However
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can ameliorate this situation by introducing a
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waste
recycling plant. It would be more effective if the authorities of the nation establish a strict law to
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must
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use
such machines by the manufacturing
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companies
. The
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companies
can
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use
these machines to recycle scraps
as well
as
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used
items to produce
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new
one or
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destroy
them.
Therefore
, using such trash processor not
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only
will
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reduce
the amount of
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rubbish
in the environment,
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but
also
generate profit for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
.
For instance
, the production of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rubbish
has declined
drastically
in Bangladesh after enforcing the law by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
business organizations for installing garbage management machines in the factories.

In conclusion
, the gradual invention is one of the major causes of the extra amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rubbish
creation.
Nevertheless
, this issue can
be mitigated
by the national authorities by installing plants for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
management.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries, life expectancy is increasing, thereby forcing people to work hard for their retirement benefits. There is an alternative option saying that people should be working earlier in their younger years. Is this a positive or negative develop v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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