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In many countries in the world, some people can earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country. others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

In many countries in the world, some people can earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country. others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 2
As a result of globalization, skilled workers are welcomed and paid high salary in most of the developed countries. Salary varies depending on job and effort needed. Few suggest that government should control the salary scale and establish a limit for it, while few oppose the view. This essay discusses both views and will draw a conclusion. People migrate to different counties in search of a lucrative job, and many cooperative business entrepreneurs attract professionals by offering high salaries and through other fringe benefits. For example, many IT employees are relocating to the US from India in search of better financial support. If an employee is paid well, he will work sincerely and happily for the company. Eventually, this will help in the company development and leads to the overall development of the country. In the same way, many people who work abroad send money to their family, this indeed will improve the foreign exchange and economic growth of the parent country as well. On the contrary, based on the salary tax and other obligations also will increase, this will invite more chaos. For example, based on income all citizens have to pay tax and other due to the government. Moreover, in many countries salary is not paid equally and discriminations in payment may lead to more perplexities. Secondly, the high salaried job requires more involvement from the labors and this may reflect negatively in their family life and health. For instance, an employee who withdraws a hefty amount has to work hard for the company, this change in priority may produce a state of the quandary in family life. So high salaried employees must be limited to maintain a social equilibrium. Form the above view, it can be stated that the government can keep certain criteria for salary but a full restriction may lead to chaos.
As a result
of globalization, skilled workers
are welcomed
and paid
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high
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salary
in most of the developed
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countries
.
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Salary
varies depending on job and effort needed. Few suggest that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should control the
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salary
scale and establish a limit for it, while few oppose the view. This essay discusses both views and will draw a conclusion.

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People
migrate to
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different
counties in search of a lucrative job, and
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many
cooperative business entrepreneurs attract professionals by offering
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high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salaries
and through other fringe benefits.
For example
,
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many
IT
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employees
are relocating to the US from India in search of better financial support. If an
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employee
is paid
well, he will work
sincerely
and
happily
for the
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company
.
Eventually
, this will
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help
in the
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company
development and leads to the
overall
development of the
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country
.
In the same way
,
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many
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people
who work abroad
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send
money to their family, this
indeed
will
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improve
the foreign exchange and economic growth of the parent
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country
as well
.

On the contrary
, based on the
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salary
tax and other obligations
also
will increase, this will invite more chaos.
For example
, based on income all citizens
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have to
pay tax and other due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
Moreover
, in
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many
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countries
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salary
is not paid
equally
and discriminations in payment may lead to more perplexities.
Secondly
, the
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high
salaried job requires more involvement from the labors and this may reflect
negatively
in their family life and health.
For instance
, an
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employee
who withdraws a hefty amount
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has to
work
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hard
for the
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company
, this
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change
in priority may produce a state of the quandary in family life.
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So
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high
salaried
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employees
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must
be limited
to maintain a social equilibrium.

Form the above view, it can
be stated
that the
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government
can
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keep
certain criteria for
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salary
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but
a full restriction may lead to chaos.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries in the world, some people can earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country. others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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