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In many countries in the world, some people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this good for a country. Others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss the both views and give your opinion. v.2

In many countries in the world, some people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this good for a country. Others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss the both views and give your opinion. v. 2
Nowadays, people can achieve high incentives. Some people think that this would be helpful for the population in the growth of the economy, while others think that the authorities may stop the rise of salary at a certain level. This essay will discuss both the view and I support the former view. To begin with, a person having high salaries will be beneficial for the country. One of the key parameters is that an individual can spend their money to provide the service to the people of their nation. This will give the chance to other people to change their financial status and literacy. For example, a person can start the teaching institute which gives free study to the middle-class families. Moreover, this kind of human can expand their business in which creates the opportunity for the educated people in their country. In addition, to that they also start a business in the abroad by this way also increase the economy of the country. At last, the people of the nation get a discipline and job, even by doing foreign money exchange helps the state. On the other hand, some think that rise of income may be controlled by the government. Firstly, people think that a man having more money would start to use exported products, which spoil the business of the local vendors of the state. For instance, Research conducted shows that many people now prefer to use products that comes from the abroad, such as United Colours is the brand delivering the children’s clothes, become a more popular in the higher salaries people. Hence, people will continue to use this product as a result the future generation will forget the culture and tradition of the society. In conclusion, although the somebody having a high salary will help an individual getting the physical and the nation by financial support, the purpose of controlling one’s income is to protect the culture and tradition of them. The government should support and motivate this higher salaries people.
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think
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the rise of
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at a certain level. This essay will discuss both the view and I support the former view.

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with, a person having high
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will be beneficial for the country. One of the key parameters is that an individual can spend their money to provide the service to the
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people
of their nation. This will give the chance to other
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to
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change
their financial status and literacy.
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start
the teaching institute which gives free study to the middle-
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families.
Moreover
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in their country.
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a business in the abroad by this way
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increase the economy of the country. At last, the
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of the nation
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a discipline and job, even by doing foreign money exchange
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the state.

On the other hand
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that rise of income may
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.
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that a
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having more money would
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exported products, which spoil the business of the local vendors of the state.
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products that
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from the abroad, such as United
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is the brand delivering the children’s clothes, become a more popular in the higher
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salaries
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.
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,
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people
will continue to
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this product
as a result
the future generation will forget the culture and tradition of the society.

In conclusion
, although the somebody having a high
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salary
will
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help
an individual getting the physical and the nation by financial support, the purpose of controlling one’s income is to protect the culture and tradition of them. The
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government
should support and motivate
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IELTS essay In many countries in the world, some people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this good for a country. Others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss the both views and give your opinion. v. 2

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