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In many countries in the world, some people can earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country. others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

In many countries in the world, some people can earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country. others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 1
There is no doubt that over the last few decades more and more women have gotten high-level jobs. While there are quite a lot of people who support the idea of this number is too low and the government should foster companies and organizations to raise it, others tend to disagree with this position. I strongly agree with the former opinion and in this essay, it will be supported class with arguments and class. The main reason why I think the government should not do anything in this area is because this would be an artificial development and it will be a potential host of the issues. This is because CEOs, directors and other top-level managers have got their jobs due to their work results and professional skills. In contrast, if a person without such accomplishments, and based only on her sex, receives such position, this company or organization will face problems caused by unqualified management in the near future. Probably nobody would argue that this is a huge drawback. Another reason why I think it shouldn’t be done is due to the fact that contemporary legislation has proved that the current system is working fine. Indeed, over last decades the economy shows exponential growth and today’s management has proved its effectiveness. For example, A recent study conducted by the University of London concluded that companies that are managed by men are 90% more successful in the modern market than the ones which are managed by women. Consequently, it is imperative for the government to keep economic growth and save jobs for men and women because without good management everyone will lose. In conclusion, I firmly believe that a public authorities should not force class and organizations to hire women in managerial positions because it is unnatural thus cause various class problems which I described above. After analysing the subject, it has become evident that the current is a result of evolution and must be respected.
There is no doubt that over the last few decades more and more
women
have gotten high-level jobs. While there are quite
a lot of
people
who support the
idea
of this number is too low and the
government
should foster
companies
and organizations to raise it, others tend to disagree with this position. I
strongly
agree
with the former opinion and in this essay, it will
be supported
class
with arguments and
class
.

The main reason why I
think
the
government
should not do anything in this area is
because
this would be an artificial development and it will be a potential host of the issues. This is
because
CEOs, directors and other top-level managers have
got
their jobs due to their work results and professional
skills
.
In contrast
, if a person without such accomplishments, and based
only
on her sex, receives such position, this
company
or organization will face problems caused by unqualified management in the near future.
Probably
nobody would argue that this is a huge drawback.

Another reason why I
think
it shouldn’t
be done
is due to the fact that contemporary legislation has proved that the
current
system is working fine.
Indeed
, over last decades the economy
shows
exponential growth and
today
’s management has proved its effectiveness.
For example
, A recent study conducted by the University of London concluded that
companies
that
are managed
by
men
are 90% more successful in the modern market than the ones which
are managed
by
women
.
Consequently
, it is imperative for the
government
to
keep
economic growth and save jobs for
men
and
women
because
without
good
management everyone will lose.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that a public
authorities
should not force
class
and organizations to hire
women
in managerial positions
because
it is unnatural
thus
cause various
class
problems which I
described
above. After
analysing
the subject, it has become evident that the
current
is a result of evolution and
must
be respected
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries in the world, some people can earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country. others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
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