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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.21

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 21
Every Government wants to provide safer and faster transport services to its public. It is considered as one of the achievements of Government. Now, the question is whether to provide more rail services or more road services. This is a big question in all the developing countries. This essay delves into both the arguments before arriving at a logical conclusion. To begin with railways, it helps millions of people to travel from one place to another at very low cost. It also helps in trade and services by transferring the goods from one city to another. Secondly, there is less environmental degradation using railways. When we use roads, then there is a high wastage of fuels and it also leads to pollution. Thirdly, the number of road accidents are much higher than rail accidents, which leads to massive deaths. Another reason is as railway tracks are set mostly outside the city which helps in reduction of traffic. On the flip side of coin, the construction of roads requires less funds as contrast to the construction of rails. For developing or underdeveloped country, it is not possible to spend astronomically. Secondly, the reach of roads is with each town and village of the country. This is not possible with railway tracks. Thirdly, sometimes individuals needs to travel for urgent work. Then roads are more appropriate as for railways, advance booking is required. After looking into each and every aspect of an essay, it arises at a rationale conclusion that the Government use money on rails or roads according to their convenience. They must consult with their Finance Ministry for consultation of funds and also with Development Authorities for planning the town or city map. The Government may also consult with its public. As in commercial cities like Bombay, Delhi, Kolkata and so on railways tracks are more significant and for residential cities, road transport is more important.
Every
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Government
wants to provide safer and faster transport
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services
to its public. It
is considered
as one of the achievements of
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Government
.
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Now
, the question is whether to provide more
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rail
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services
or more
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road
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services
. This is a
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big
question in all the
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developing countries
. This essay delves into both the arguments
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before
arriving at a logical conclusion.

To
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begin
with
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railways
, it
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helps
millions of
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people
to travel from one place to another at
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very
low cost. It
also
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helps
in trade and
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services
by transferring the
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goods
from one city to another.
Secondly
, there is less environmental degradation using
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railways
. When we
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use
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roads
, then there is a high wastage of fuels and it
also
leads to pollution.
Thirdly
, the number of
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road
accidents are much higher than
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rail
accidents, which leads to massive deaths. Another reason is as
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railway
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tracks
are set
mostly
outside the city which
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helps
in reduction of traffic.

On the flip side of coin, the construction of
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roads
requires
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less
funds as contrast to the construction of rails. For developing or underdeveloped country, it is not possible to spend
astronomically
.
Secondly
, the reach of
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roads
is with each town and village of the country. This is not possible with
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railway
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tracks
.
Thirdly
,
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sometimes
individuals needs to travel for urgent work. Then
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roads
are more appropriate as for
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railways
, advance booking
is required
.

After looking into each and every aspect of an essay, it arises at a rationale conclusion that the
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Government
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use
money on rails or
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roads
according to their convenience. They
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must
consult with their Finance Ministry for consultation of funds and
also
with Development Authorities for planning the town or city map. The
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Government
may
also
consult with its public. As in commercial
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cities
like Bombay, Delhi, Kolkata and
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so
on
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railways
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tracks
are more significant and for residential
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cities
,
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road
transport is more
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important
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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