In many countries, as people are earning more these days they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development v.1
In many countries, as people are earning more these days they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development v. 1
Over the years, people are spending profusely owing to higher incomes. However, as the salary hikes, people gradually become addicted to shopping and saves less. In my opinion, this can be detrimental to society as people will never be at peace and always be lured to earn more money.
Firstly, as the monetary situation improves, the lifestyle of the people becomes expensive and they start investing in multifarious high-end products. To illustrate, many people buy new cars when their salary is increased, though the old car was functional and fulfilling all the requirements. Secondly, a vicious circle of never-ending wishes for materialistic things gets started, when a person is overindulged in shopping. Therefore, at the end of the month, they do not have funds in their banks, no matter how huge the salary is. For Instance, countless people use credit cards at month end as they are short of money.
Finally, savings for the future is minimized because of the extravagant style of living. Moreover, incorporating the king-size lifestyle is easy, but compromising lavish lifestyle during monetary issues is extremely painful. For example, many businessmen commit suicide after a business failure, as they are not able to degrade their standard of living. However, the circulation of money increases in the market, as the number of customer increases, but this cannot suffice for the problems people go through by overspending.
In Conclusion, people should not get trapped in the cycle of earning high and spending high. Attaining a balance between spending and saving money is the main key to lead a quality life. 
Over the years,  
people
 are spending  
profusely
 owing to higher incomes.  
However
, as the salary hikes,  
people
  gradually
 become addicted to shopping and saves less. In my opinion, this can be detrimental to society as  
people
 will never be at peace and always  
be lured
 to earn more money. 
Firstly
, as the monetary situation  
improves
, the lifestyle of the  
people
 becomes  
expensive and
 they  
start
 investing in multifarious high- 
end
 products. To illustrate,  
many
  people
  buy
 new cars when their salary  
is increased
, though the  
old
 car was functional and fulfilling all the requirements.  
Secondly
, a vicious circle of never-ending wishes for materialistic things  
gets
  started
, when a person  
is overindulged
 in shopping.  
Therefore
, at the  
end
 of the month, they do not have funds in their banks, no matter how huge the salary is.  
For Instance
, countless  
people
  use
 credit cards at month  
end
 as they are short of money. 
Finally
, savings for the future  
is minimized
  because
 of the extravagant style of living.  
Moreover
, incorporating the king-size lifestyle is easy,  
but
 compromising lavish lifestyle during monetary issues is  
extremely
 painful.  
For example
,  
many
 businessmen commit suicide after a business failure, as they are not able to degrade their standard of living.  
However
, the circulation of money increases in the market, as the number of customer increases,  
but
 this cannot suffice for the problems  
people
 go through by overspending. 
In Conclusion
,  
people
 should not  
get
 trapped in the cycle of earning high and spending high. Attaining a balance between spending and saving money is the main key to lead a quality life. 
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