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In many countries, an increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.4

In many countries, an increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games. with this opinion? v. 4
It is no doubt true that human has a vital impact on the environment. Although nowadays, one of the main scientists' concerns is environmental issues, it seems that people would not take it seriously and would not change their way of life. There could be several reasons why this is the case and I believe that governments can promote individuals to tackle the problem. There are various proofs why people do not care about their surrounding environment. In my opinion, the most significant one could be a lack of knowledge. In other words, in fact, illiterate and low-literacy people of society have the lowest amount of information about environmental protection and its how it would affect their lives. Therefore, the consequences of disregard for the environment are not tangible to them. Besides that, it is crystal clear that humans can not respect and care about the environment unless possibilities and facilities are provided. There are several actions that governments can do to address the problems. Firstly, a simple solution would be to increase general information for ignorant people. They should be aware of the importance of the environment in their life and also in the next generation. Media and press can be helpful to enhance consciousness. Secondly, governments can set green taxes for companies and factories to become more environmentally friendly and to produce less toxic gas. In conclusion, I believe that governments could help to raise public awareness about environmental matters and help them to change their way of living.
It is no doubt true that human has a vital impact on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. Although nowadays, one of the main scientists' concerns is environmental issues, it seems that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
would not take it
seriously
and would not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their way of life. There could be several reasons why this is the case and I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
can promote individuals to tackle the problem.

There are various proofs why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not care about their surrounding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. In my opinion, the most significant one could be a lack of knowledge.
In other words
, in fact, illiterate and low-literacy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of society have the lowest amount of information about environmental protection and its how it would affect their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
Therefore
, the consequences of disregard for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
are not tangible to them.
Besides
that, it is crystal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that humans can not respect and care about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
unless possibilities and facilities
are provided
.

There are several actions that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
can do to address the problems.
Firstly
, a simple solution would be to increase general information for ignorant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. They should be aware of the importance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
in their life and
also
in the
next
generation. Media and press can be helpful to enhance consciousness.
Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
can set green taxes for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and factories to become more
environmentally
friendly and to produce less toxic gas.

In conclusion
, I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to raise public awareness about environmental matters and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their way of living.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries, an increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games. with this opinion? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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