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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
It is said that people can opt to create their own house no matter how the surrounding areas look like due to little management on the establishment of new houses. I believe that, while this has advantages, the disadvantages need to be taken more consideration into. On the one hand, individuals can enjoy their lives to the fullest by having the freedom to build their own houses. They will be able to decide on the size, the painting colours or the design, which meets their needs and comforts them. Meanwhile, the nearby old buildings are more likely to be old-fashioned and sometimes not safe to live in. Therefore, the local authorities should spend budgets on upgrading those old houses rather than put a restriction on new buildings. From my point of view, those advantages might be outweighed by the disadvantages which will be mentioned below. On the other hand, if people build their houses mainly based on their personal preferences, it will negatively affect the neighbourhood in some ways. Firstly, the existence of skyscrapers in some tourist attractions might dominate the landscape, leading to visitor's dissatisfaction and annoyance. Let take Hoi An ancient town as an example, tourist flocks come to there for discovering the exotic architecture and enjoying the low speed of life, not for visiting entertainment complexes or shopping malls. Secondly, the construction of high-rise buildings in some residential areas where are geographical fragile, might destroy the land's structure and damage the surrounding apartments. In conclusion, the freedom of making new houses seems to have more drawbacks than benefits. I think that governments should not only enact the construction laws on new buildings, but also preserve the old ones.
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is said
that
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people
can opt to create their
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own
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house
no matter how the surrounding areas look like due to
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little
management on the establishment of
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new
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houses
. I believe that, while this has advantages, the disadvantages need to
be taken
more consideration into.

On the one hand, individuals can enjoy their
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lives
to the fullest by having the freedom to build their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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houses
. They will be able to decide on the size, the painting
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colours
or the design, which meets their needs and comforts them. Meanwhile, the nearby
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old
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buildings
are more likely to be
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old
-fashioned and
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sometimes
not safe to
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live
in.
Therefore
, the local authorities should spend budgets on upgrading those
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old
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houses
rather
than put a restriction on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
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buildings
. From my point of view, those advantages might
be outweighed
by the disadvantages which will
be mentioned
below.

On the other hand
, if
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people
build their
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houses
mainly
based on their personal preferences, it will
negatively
affect the
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neighbourhood
in
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some
ways.
Firstly
, the existence of skyscrapers in
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some
tourist attractions might dominate the landscape, leading to visitor's dissatisfaction and annoyance.
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Let
take
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Hoi
An ancient town as an example, tourist flocks
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come
to there for discovering the exotic architecture and enjoying the low speed of life, not for visiting entertainment complexes or shopping malls.
Secondly
, the construction of high-rise
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buildings
in
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some
residential areas where are geographical fragile, might
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destroy
the land's structure and damage the surrounding apartments.

In conclusion
, the freedom of making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
seems to have more drawbacks than benefits. I
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think
that
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governments
should not
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only
enact the construction laws on
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new
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buildings
,
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but
also
preserve the
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old
ones.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

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