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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
Some people are of the opinion that they should have freedom of choice when it comes to designing their own houses, and that they should not be restricted to any former local styles. Although freedom in architecture can be beneficial in fostering diversity, too much leeway in building houses would greatly spoil the overall landscape of the local area and therefore I believe this is more likely to be a negative development. Free house design is, to a certain extent, a good way of promoting diversity. City skylines, for example, would be more interesting to look at if there are buildings and houses with different shapes and sizes. Furthermore, people from different societal background see houses as manifestations of personalities, wealth, and societal positions. Mansions of the rich, exotic houses of those who are artistic all combine with other normal-looking ones to form a melting pot of creativity. However, I would not consider an area whose houses are built without any regard to the nature of the surroundings beautiful. Having different styles of houses co-existing in one place can be an architectural disaster rather than a welcome innovation. Ho Chi Minh City is a case in point; ugly buildings not aligned in style with other structures in the city have been erected for years, leaving the historic parts of the city messily mingled with the concrete jungle of brick houses and skyscrapers. Architectural homogeneity, on the other hand, often brings aesthetic appeals to the local landscape. The beauty of ancient towns, for example, comes from the uniformity and harmony in terms of architectural design. In conclusion, my firm conviction is that new houses should be better built in a similar fashion to the other buildings in the area.
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to designing their
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houses
, and that they should not
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to any former local styles. Although freedom in architecture can be beneficial in fostering diversity, too much leeway in
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building
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houses
would
greatly
spoil the
overall
landscape of the local area and
therefore
I believe this is more likely to be a
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negative
development.

Free
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house
design is, to a certain extent, a
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good
way of promoting diversity. City skylines,
for example
, would be more interesting to look at if there are
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buildings
and
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houses
with
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different
shapes and sizes.
Furthermore
,
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people
from
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different
societal background
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see
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houses
as manifestations of personalities, wealth, and societal positions. Mansions of the rich, exotic
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houses
of those who are artistic all combine with
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other
normal-looking ones to form a melting pot of creativity.

However
, I would not consider an area whose
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houses
are built
without any regard to the nature of the surroundings
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beautiful
. Having
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different
styles of
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houses
co-existing in one place can be an architectural disaster
rather
than a welcome innovation. Ho Chi Minh City is a case in point; ugly
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buildings
not aligned in style with
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other
structures in the city have
been erected
for years, leaving the historic parts of the city
messily
mingled with the concrete jungle of brick
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
and skyscrapers. Architectural homogeneity, on the
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other
hand,
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often
brings aesthetic appeals to the local landscape. The beauty of ancient towns,
for example
,
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comes
from the uniformity and harmony in terms of architectural design.

In conclusion
, my firm conviction is that new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
should be better built
Consider replacing "in a similar fashion" with the adverb for "similar"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a similar fashion
to the
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other
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buildings
in the area.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
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