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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same as the old house style in local areas. Do the advanta v.3

In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same as the old house style in local areas. Do the advanta v. 3
Recent years have witnessed tremendous developments in agricultural science, yet every day people all over the world continue to suffer and even die from hunger. In my opinion, this is because innovations rarely impact the developing world and the best solution for it is to direct humanitarian funding towards these advances. The main cause of more advanced agricultural methods not reaching the people who need it the most is that the developing world has trouble implementing these methods. There are a number of reasons for this ranging from limited financial resources to poor existing infrastructure to political instability, depending on the country in question. One example of this would be in many African nations, where malnourishment has historically been highest. Countries like the Congo have seen revolution after revolution over the last several decades, which has effectively destabilised the entire country. The universities where students would learn about changes in agriculture are frequently shut down or destroyed. The young people who would become agricultural scientists end up drawn into the conflict as soldiers or victims. Long-term economic neglect means that the government has very limited ability to subsidise farming. These problems are present to varying degrees in countries around the world and offer one possible explanation for the continued prevalence of hunger. The solution that I believe would be most effective is directing humanitarian funds previously focused on food aid towards education and agricultural infrastructure. Food aid is a notoriously poor solution because it only offers an immediate solution and warlords often exploit it to support their continued mistreatment of their people. It hurts more than it helps. However, there would be better long-term effects if international organisations and governments redirected that money into helping build better farms, provide more modern equipment, and sending qualified professionals to train people in need. There is a TedTalk by a young man in Kenya who built his own windmill out of old bicycle parts and by reading a book in the local library. It is large enough to power his own house and he was seeking financing for a larger one that would power irrigation channels for the entire village. If more people like him can be found or trained, then this will have an impact that lasts for decades and is relatively impervious to the factors preventing agricultural advances from taking root in developing countries. In conclusion, developing companies face myriad problems that hinder their ability to take advantage of newer agricultural models and we should direct more funding to helping these countries learn more about new farming methods. This is likely to be an important issue in the world as the gap between rich and poor, develop and undeveloped widens while technological progress continues its indifferent march forward.
Recent years have witnessed tremendous developments in
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agricultural
science,
yet
every day
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people
all over the
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world
continue to suffer and even
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die
from hunger. In my opinion, this is
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because
innovations rarely impact the
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developing
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world
and the best
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solution
for it is to direct humanitarian funding towards these advances.

The main cause of more advanced
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agricultural
methods not reaching the
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people
who need it the most is that the
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developing
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world
has trouble implementing these methods. There are a number of reasons for this ranging from limited financial resources to poor existing infrastructure to political instability, depending on the
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country
in question. One example of this would be in
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many
African nations, where malnourishment has
historically
been highest.
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Countries
like the Congo have
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seen
revolution after revolution over the last several decades, which has
effectively
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destabilised
the entire
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country
. The universities where students would learn about
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changes
in agriculture are
frequently
shut down or
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destroyed
. The young
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people
who would become
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agricultural
scientists
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end
up drawn into the conflict as soldiers or victims. Long-term economic neglect means that the
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government
has
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very
limited ability to
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subsidise
farming. These problems are present to varying degrees in
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countries
around the
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world
and offer one possible explanation for the continued prevalence of hunger.

The
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solution
that I believe would be most effective is directing humanitarian funds previously focused on food aid towards education and
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agricultural
infrastructure. Food aid is a
notoriously
poor
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solution
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because
it
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only
offers an immediate
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solution
and warlords
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often
exploit it to support their continued mistreatment of their
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people
. It hurts more than it
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helps
.
However
, there would be better long-term effects if international
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organisations
and
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governments
redirected that money into helping build better farms, provide more modern equipment, and sending qualified professionals to train
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people
in need. There is a
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TedTalk
by a young
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man
in Kenya who built his
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own
windmill out of
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old
bicycle parts and by reading a book in the local library. It is large
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enough
to power his
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own
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house and
he was seeking financing for a larger one that would power irrigation channels for the entire village. If more
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people
like him can
be found
or trained, then this will have an impact that lasts for decades and is
relatively
impervious to the factors preventing
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agricultural
advances from taking root in
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developing
countries.

In conclusion
,
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developing
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companies
face myriad problems that hinder their ability to take advantage of newer
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agricultural
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models and
we should direct more funding to helping these
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countries
learn more about new farming methods. This is likely to be an
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important
issue in the
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world
as the gap between rich and poor, develop and undeveloped widens while technological progress continues its indifferent march forward.
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IELTS essay In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same as the old house style in local areas. Do the advanta v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
457 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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