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In everyday life, when people speak of memory, they are almost always speaking about what psychologists would call explicit memories. An explicit memory is a conscious or intentional recollection, usually of facts, names, events, or other things that a pe v.1

In everyday life, when people speak of memory, they are almost always speaking about what psychologists would call explicit memories. An explicit memory is a conscious or intentional recollection, usually of facts, names, events, or other things that a pe v. 1
It is considered by some that money is the greatest gift that anyone can give to adolescents. Interestingly, however, others opposed that this is not true. In my own opinion, giving these children the best time together is the greatest gift that teenagers can receive. On the one hand, there is a reason why some people believe that monetary gifts are the best for youngsters. This is because it can teach them how to manage money effectively. Teenagers will be capable to decide when and where they can utilize the money that was gifted to them. For instance, if they want to purchase something, they will learn the need to save money thereby increasing their awareness on the proper saving and spending. Hence, some people view this as the best gifts ever. On the other hand, others argue that money can't be the greatest gift to give these adolescents. One reason is that it can take away the essence of gift giving. This can instill in these teenager's mild that money is important in everything. As a result, it will somehow pay less importance to moral values such as sharing and loving one another. Thus, others feel that this kind of gift can't be the best gift. In my own perspective, I consider that the best gift that people can give to children is quality bonding time. While money can buy material things, it can never buy family and passion. Moreover, money only provides temporary happiness, but a family can give these children everlasting happiness. Therefore, I think that love and care are the best gifts to give. In conclusion, people may vary in opinions, I believe that for teenagers to grow up as better people, they should not be spoiled with monetary gifts, but rather give them the best time together as a precious member of a family.
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to adolescents.
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something, they will learn the need to save
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thereby increasing their awareness on the proper saving and spending.
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these adolescents. One reason is that it can take away the essence of
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giving. This can instill in these
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, it will somehow pay less importance to moral values such as sharing and loving one another.
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, others feel that this kind of
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gift.

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perspective, I consider that the
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that
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to children is quality bonding time. While
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can
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material things, it can never
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family and passion.
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these children everlasting happiness.
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,
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may vary in opinions, I believe that for
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teenagers
to grow up as better
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,
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them the
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time together as a precious member of a family.
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Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay In everyday life, when people speak of memory, they are almost always speaking about what psychologists would call explicit memories. An explicit memory is a conscious or intentional recollection, usually of facts, names, events, or other things that a pe v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
309 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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