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Talk about your best friend and explain why is he/she your best friend. Include examples and details to support your position. v.1

Talk about your best friend and explain why is he/she your best friend. Include examples and details to support your position. v. 1
Integration of a nation's economy with the world economy benefits by way of enhancing the employment opportunities and providing a platform for the distribution of surplus production to others. However, it brings some negative consequences also in the form of widening the gaps among developed and developing economies. One of the significant benefits of globalisation is the increase in employment levels in an economy. Globalisation has allowed a free trade among different economies. As a result, the industries gets a surety that the goods produced by them, will be sold completely, if not in their domestic market, then in the international markets. Hence, they do not hesitate to start new companies, as well as to raise their existing production capacity. Such efforts automatically lead to a higher demand of the manpower. In addition, the business houses in the developing countries can outsource the latest technical equipments from technically sound countries that helps in enhancing their efficiency. Finally, it promotes a healthy competition among different economies, which boosts them to make the best possible use of the resources available to them. Globalisation has its own drawbacks too. Firstly, the developed countries, being in a position to use updated technical knowledge, can manufacture products at a low cost. Therefore, they are able to fill the International market with their production, leaving no scope for the developing countries. Such a situation widens the gap among developed and less developed economies, which eventually leads to a dominance of a few economies in the global market. China, for instance, is dominant in providing a variety of goods at cheaper rates in the world. This dominance is harmful in the long run. To conclude, I consider that globalisation benefits the world’s economies by helping them in enhancing job avenues and enabling them to use modern technology. However, the negative aspects of it in the form of dominance of a few economies in the global market cannot be ignored.
Integration of a nation's
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economy
with the world
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economy
benefits by way of enhancing the employment opportunities and providing a platform for the distribution of surplus production to others.
However
, it brings
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some
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negative
consequences
also
in the form of widening the gaps among
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developed
and developing economies.

One of the significant benefits of
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globalisation
is the increase in employment levels in an
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economy
.
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Globalisation
has
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allowed
a free trade among
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different
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economies
.
As a result
, the industries
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gets
a surety that the
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goods
produced by them, will
be sold
completely, if not in their domestic
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market
, then in the international markets.
Hence
, they do not hesitate to
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start
new
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companies
,
as well
as to raise their existing production capacity. Such efforts
automatically
lead to a higher demand of the manpower.
In addition
, the business
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houses
in the developing
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countries
can outsource the latest technical equipments from
technically
sound
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countries
that
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helps
in enhancing their efficiency.
Finally
, it promotes a healthy competition among
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different
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economies
, which boosts them to
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make
the best possible
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use
of the resources available to them.

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Globalisation
has its
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own
drawbacks too.
Firstly
, the
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developed
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countries
, being in a position to
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use
updated technical knowledge, can manufacture products at a low cost.
Therefore
, they are able to fill the International
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market
with their production, leaving no scope for the developing
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countries
. Such a situation widens the gap among
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developed
and less
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developed
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economies
, which
eventually
leads to a dominance of a few
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economies
in the global
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market
. China,
for instance
, is dominant in providing a variety of
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goods
at cheaper rates in the world. This dominance is harmful in the long run.

To conclude
, I consider that
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globalisation
benefits the world’s
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economies
by helping them in enhancing job avenues and enabling them to
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use
modern technology.
However
, the
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negative
aspects of it in the form of dominance of a few
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economies
in the global
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market
cannot be
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ignored
.
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IELTS essay Talk about your best friend and explain why is he/she your best friend. Include examples and details to support your position. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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