These days, many people argue that in countries with the high unemployment rates, primary school students who are deemed as unemployable in the future should not be offered secondary education. From my perspective, I completely disagree with this point of view for several reasons.
First of all, it is undeniable that the prediction of upturns and downturns of job market is difficult. At one period there may be a demand for workers in many sectors of a country’s economy. Therefore, education system needs to prepare large numbers of students up to and beyond secondary school level to meet the needs of employers. For example, while technology is replacing many traditional jobs in such areas as agriculture and transport, it is also creating a variety of job opportunities in other sectors. As a result, it is impossible to say how many highly-educated young people will be required for the nation’s workforce.
In addition, secondary education plays a significant role in building soft skills for young people. For instance, at secondary school level, students are required to work on group assignments or presentations, which they need to coordinate ideas and manage team. This, consequently, would help them get insights to team spirits and develop collaboration and communication skills. In this way, students who are considered as no hope of finding a job when at primary school can have better chances of getting employed.
In conclusion, for all reasons mentioned above, I wholly disagree with the view that it is unnecessary for government to offer secondary education for primary school pupils who will not have good prospects to find a job in the future.
These days,
many
people
argue that in countries with the high unemployment rates, primary
school
students
who
are deemed
as unemployable in the future should not
be offered
secondary
education
. From my perspective, I completely disagree with this point of view for several reasons.
First of all
, it is undeniable that the prediction of upturns and downturns of
job
market is difficult. At one period there may be a demand for workers in
many
sectors of a country’s economy.
Therefore
,
education
system needs to prepare large numbers of
students
up to and beyond
secondary
school
level to
meet
the needs of employers.
For example
, while technology is replacing
many
traditional
jobs
in such areas as agriculture and transport, it is
also
creating a variety of
job
opportunities in other sectors.
As a result
, it is impossible to say how
many
highly
-educated young
people
will
be required
for the nation’s workforce.
In addition
,
secondary
education
plays a significant role in building soft
skills
for young
people
.
For instance
, at
secondary
school
level,
students
are required
to work on group assignments or presentations, which they need to coordinate
ideas
and manage team. This,
consequently
, would
help
them
get
insights to team spirits and develop collaboration and communication
skills
. In this way,
students
who
are considered
as no hope of finding a
job
when at primary
school
can have better chances of getting employed.
In conclusion
, for all reasons mentioned above, I wholly disagree with the view that it is unnecessary for
government
to offer
secondary
education
for primary
school
pupils who will not have
good
prospects to find a
job
in the future.
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