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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.35

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 35
In Britain many aged people live in old age homes where their living and health care costs are usually borne by the government. This increases the burden on the public exchequer and is not a practice. Hence, in my opinion, adult children should take the responsibility of their aged parents. The authority will be under a tremendous financial strain if it has to look after the growing population of senior citizens in the country. In order to provide good health care to older people, the ministry collects enormous amounts of taxes from its citizens. As a result, workers get to save only a small amount of money. However, if the liability is on the family, the government need not have to collect higher taxes for the purpose of elderly care. In other words, people can enjoy good income and the authorities can concentrate on improving other weaker aspects of the nation. Furthermore, when the family pays for the care, they take care to visit their parents frequently to see whether they are receiving good health care. Else, the family will not bother to care because they are not paying for the expenses. In addition, the parents also benefit also benefited from this arrangement as they get to unite with family often which can assure them an emotional support. For example, in Sikkim, a north-eastern state of India, there is a rule that the elderly people should be taken care of only by the family. In conclusion, I think, it is the responsibility of the family members to take care of the health expenses of their aged parents so older old people receive support from their children and the government is also not overburdened with elderly care
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age homes where their living and
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costs are
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. This increases the burden on the public exchequer and is not a practice.
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look after the growing population of senior citizens in the country. In order to provide
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to older
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income and the authorities can concentrate on improving other weaker aspects of the nation.

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. Else, the
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which can assure them an emotional support.
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expenses of their aged parents
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IELTS essay In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 35

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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