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1. Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.1

1. Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 1
In the competitive era, a successful person knows from their good behaviour as well as work hard. It is very difficult to be successful in a sport. Some experts believe that a sportsman needs a natural skill. However, others judge that hard production and a process can create to be renewed at present. In the below paragraphs, I will not only explain both the viewpoints, but also add my own opinion. To start with, those people who notion that a natural ability helps to the sports person in order to famous. Firstly, it consumes little time entering in the sports team. For example, if a person wants to become a sports. He or she does not have to effort hard. Because of this, they do not have to wait long time joining in the gaming industry. Sometimes, they unable to play with better performance at field of games. On the flip side, others reckon that hard work and habit are playing a considerable part in sports in order to successfully. First of all, it helps to provide the best opportunity to the players. They perform better. Likewise, both hard work and method teach to the people better performance. They learn many things from gaming. For instance, Rohit Sharma is known as a hitman of cricket, because he won many awards and matches under his team just due to his method and hard industry. To conclude, even though to be a successful in a sport needs many requirements, but form and hard task are very necessary for famous in this field. However, I deem that playing sports with struggle hard as well as proceeding are very essential around the world.
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good
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behaviour
as well
as work
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hard
. It is
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very
difficult to be successful in a
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sport
.
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Some
experts believe that a sportsman needs a natural
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skill
.
However
, others judge that
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hard
production and a process can create to
be renewed
at present. In the below paragraphs, I will not
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only
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explain
both the viewpoints,
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but
also
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add
my
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own
opinion.

To
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start
with, those
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people
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who notion
that a natural ability
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helps
to the
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sports
person in order to
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famous
.
Firstly
, it consumes
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little
time entering in the
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sports
team.
For example
, if a person wants to become a
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sports
. He or she does not
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have to
effort
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hard
.
Because of this
, they do not
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have to
wait long time joining in the gaming industry.
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Sometimes
,
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they
unable to play with better performance at field of games.

On the flip side, others reckon that
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hard
work and habit are playing a considerable part in
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sports
in order
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to
successfully
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it
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helps
to provide the best opportunity to the players. They perform better.
Likewise
, both
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hard
work and method teach to the
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people
better performance. They learn
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many
things from gaming.
For instance
, Rohit Sharma
is known
as a
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hitman
of cricket,
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because
he won
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many
awards and matches under his team
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just
due to his method and
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hard
industry.

To conclude
,
even though
to be a successful in a
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sport
needs
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many
requirements,
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but
form and
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hard
task are
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very
necessary for
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famous
in this field.
However
, I deem that playing
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sports
with struggle
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hard
as well
as proceeding are
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very
essential around the world.
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IELTS essay 1. Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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