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In Britain when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them Sometimes the government has to pay for this care Who do you think should pay for this care the government or the family Give v.29

In Britain when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them Sometimes the government has to pay for this care Who do you think should pay for this care the government or the family Give v. 29
Recently the subject of sustainability has sparked a heated debate among all countries and its residence. Using solar energy as a source for housing demands is getting common in a rapid pace. This essay will discuss the cons and pros of replacing this source with fossil origins and seek the reason for it. In the past, not long ago, most of the energy needed for households was provided by burning fossil fuels like gas and oil or any product from them. The electricity was made from burning gas to run the generators in order to produce electricity which was used to light up houses. Just like electricity, people used to warm up their homes by burning gas or using electrical heaters. As a result, using this kind of resource ended up our planet to a very dangerous situation like global warming or melting icebergs which puts human life into danger. Therefore, scientists started to seek resources that come from nature and do not harm the environment like solar power as well as wind power. There are plenty of features that we can benefit from solar energy. As an instance, the low cost of production as well as the sustainability features which cause no harm to the climate and environment. With solar panels, we can produce hot water for washing purposes and heating the space as well as producing electricity. However, there are some negative aspects like the limited life cycle of solar cells that needs a replacement after a period and uninterrupted production of power when the sky is cloudy or there is not enough direct sunlight. This essay argued about the reason why solar energy is becoming very popular in many countries and conversed about some of the advantages and disadvantages of it. To conclude, it is obvious that positive aspects of new resources like solar systems overcome their negative ones.
Recently the subject of sustainability has sparked a heated debate among all countries and its residence. Using
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solar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
as a source for housing demands is getting common in a rapid pace. This essay will discuss the cons and pros of replacing this source with fossil origins and seek the reason for it.

In the past, not long ago, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
needed for households
was provided
by burning fossil fuels like gas and oil or any product from them. The
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electricity
was made
from burning gas to run the generators in order to produce
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electricity
which was
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used
to light up
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houses
.
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Just
like
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electricity
,
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people
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used
to warm up their homes by burning gas or using electrical heaters.
As a result
, using this kind of resource ended up our planet to a
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very
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dangerous
situation like global warming or melting icebergs which puts human life into
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danger
.
Therefore
, scientists
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started
to seek resources that
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come
from nature and do not harm the environment like
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solar
power
as well
as wind power.

There are
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plenty
of features that we can benefit from
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solar
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energy
. As an instance, the low cost of production
as well
as the sustainability features which cause no harm to the climate and environment. With
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solar
panels, we can produce hot water for washing purposes and heating the space
as well
as producing
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electricity
.
However
, there are
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some
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negative
aspects like the limited life cycle of
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solar
cells that needs a replacement after a period and uninterrupted production of power when the sky is cloudy or there is not
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enough
direct sunlight.

This essay argued about the reason why
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solar
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energy
is becoming
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very
popular in
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many
countries and conversed about
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some of the
advantages and disadvantages of it.
To conclude
, it is obvious that
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positive
aspects of new resources like
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solar
systems overcome their
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negative
ones.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay In Britain when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them Sometimes the government has to pay for this care Who do you think should pay for this care the government or the family Give v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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