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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.15

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? 15
Nowadays life requirement had become more complex than before, both parents had to work to provide a better life for them self and their children, and between commitment to their work and children they don't have the time to watch over their parents, whom, they become old enough that they can't perform well without any help. Therefore, a lot of the elderly nowadays start living in a home where they find there the care and the attention they need, but these facilities do not come without charge, which will also burden the person between their life commitment and their elderly. I believe that these charges should be separated between the governments and their families. First of all, those elderly once was before the bone that these governments were to depend on for their economy, education, security, and other fields, that's why after all of their years on serves they deserve that the governments will take care of them when they end their serves. Also, they are the responsibility of their children, who, without them and their sacrifices on their health, money, and life, they couldn't admit to school to receive the best education and buy them cloth, food, and toys just to see the smile of their children and they don't feel that they are less than the other children. In the end, for these reasons, I believe that caring for the elderly is the duty of both parties and no one can ignore that they are reasons where they are now.
Nowadays
life
requirement had become more complex than
before
, both parents had to work to provide a better
life
for them self and their
children
, and between commitment to their work and
children
they don't have the time to
watch
over their parents, whom, they become
old
enough
that they can't perform well without any
help
.

Therefore
,
a lot of
the elderly nowadays
start
living in a home where they find there the care and the attention they need,
but
these facilities do not
come
without charge, which will

also
burden the person between their
life
commitment and their elderly.

I believe that these charges should
be separated
between the
governments
and their families.

First of all
, those elderly once was
before
the bone that these
governments
were to depend on for their economy, education, security, and other fields, that's why
after all
of their years on serves they deserve that the
governments
will take care of them when they
end
their serves.

Also
, they are the responsibility of their
children
, who, without them and their sacrifices on their health, money, and
life
, they couldn't admit to school to receive the best education and
buy
them cloth, food, and toys
just
to
see
the smile of their
children and
they don't feel that they are less than the other children.

In the
end
, for these reasons, I believe that caring for the elderly is the duty of both parties and no one can
ignore
that they are reasons where they are
now
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? 15

Essay
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252 words
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