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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.14

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 14
In Britain, when an individual reaches a certain age is unable to care for himself or herself and frequently these individuals end up living in a home with other aged people. In some cases, the elderly rely on the government to cover these expenses. Although, I agree that the family should pay for the care. However, if we put more thought into it and analyzed this further; I think it's fair to say that the government should cover these expenses because the family of the older person doesn't have the financial resources to pay for his or her care. Another reason is that these individuals may have no family that can look after them. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons why the government should cover the elderly care expense. First, the lack of financial resources is a good indicator that a family is unable to afford a senior care provider home. In fact, these services are very expensive and low-income families are unable to pay for it. Some people can argue that senior folks should live with their families instead if they are unable to pay for a senior home. and I agree with that statement to some extent. However, these individuals will not receive the medical treatment that they will receive at a senior facility. Hence, it is important that the government intervene and help and support the elderly. Another indicator that the government should pay for a senior care provider is if an elderly person lives by himself or herself. This is equally important because that person probably has no one to look after him or her. Senior care can be lifesaving in this case because they will receive the care that they deserve. For instance, Norway has earned first place worldwide for senior equality and for a place for security. The Scandinavian country it's aware of this issue and does their best to assist their senior citizens. In conclusion, when someone becomes older, they frequently go to reside at a senior care facility. Often, the government provides financial support, so these individuals can live their remaining days while they are receiving the care that they deserve. After analyzing the question of who should be responsible for the financial burden of the senior citizen? It should be the family or the government? It’s clear that not all seniors are the same, not everyone can enjoy this luxury. Some people have the financial means to pay for it while others can’t afford to pay. Moreover, some people might not have a family at all. Hence, the government should provide senior care for all its citizens.
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to cover these expenses. Although, I
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should cover these expenses
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the
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of the older person doesn't have the
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resources to
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for
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his or her
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. Another reason is that these
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may have no
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that can look after them. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons why the
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should cover the elderly
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expense.

First
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resources is a
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indicator that a
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is
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provider home. In fact, these services are
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expensive and low-income
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can argue that
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folks should
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with their
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instead
if they are
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home.
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and
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will not receive the medical treatment that they will receive at a
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senior
facility.
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that the
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intervene and
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help
and support the elderly.

Another indicator that the
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should
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for a
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provider is if an elderly person
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that person
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can be lifesaving
in this case
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because
they will receive the
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that they deserve.
For instance
, Norway has earned
first
place worldwide for
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senior
equality and for a place for security. The Scandinavian country it's aware of this issue and does their best to assist their
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senior
citizens.

In conclusion
, when someone becomes older, they
frequently
go to reside at a
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senior
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care
facility.
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provides
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support,
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these
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can
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live
their remaining days while they are receiving the
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care
that they deserve. After analyzing the question of who should be responsible for the
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financial
burden of the
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citizen? It should be the
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or the
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? It’s
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are the same, not everyone can enjoy this luxury.
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have the
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for it while others can’t afford to
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.
Moreover
,
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might not have a
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at all.
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should provide
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for all its citizens.
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64Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
438 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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