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In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. v.2

In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. v. 2
The contribution is a primary fact to make something better. in agroup work work must be needed all persons contibution, not only new perons but also a experince' s person. It is typically disputed that expert more likle to make imporatant contribution rather than beginner. Personally, I disagree with this statement, i believe that for any work, expert pay more attention rather than new person. I feel this way for several reasons, which i will explore in the following essay. First of all, what is the definition of expert? it is obvious that some one who experince and doing the same things long time. Although contibutions does not always deoneds on beginner or expert but it is surest that to gain any success must be needed exper contribution. In the beginning, as a starter needed to do somthing much and needed lots of trining since they can improve his or her self but this beginning effort could not surely bring any succed. for example, in a socar team always open for a beginner but always depends on the senior player more specifically like leonal messi in barcelona. Although when he joined barcelona tem as a good talanted player and makes lots of contribution but this team only when depnds ronaldinho. this dependence and contribution now shows in present barcelona team. moreover, for outcome from any task, though needed any persons contribution but always bring better and more positivily by the senior experince person. Secondly, if we are trying to do something successfully, we need to always depend on expert people. to make a work sucessful, needed a joint hard work. expert always do something is like relaible without expert opinion and plane would not possible to bring any success. For example, if some one try to admit USA university must be needed some Knowledge about related field research experince. so, in every field always prefare expert people. finally, contribution not only means to effort, it is always indicates lots of things. sometimes and it is important for beginner to do sometimg lots because actually this times helps to makes them experince but if something bring success then to considered contribution. For example, i wanted to bring my MS degree from USA university, thus i needed to work and a superviser though my supervisor only prefer me then he confirm my ability but it is true that supervisor is higly exper and doing lots of contribution rathen than as a beginner like me. In conclusion, for doing better must be needed expert contribution besides beginner. Although someone belives that beginner impacts more rather than expert but i personally belive that for any work expert contribution has lot.
The
contribution
is a primary fact to
make
something
better.
in
agroup
work
work
must
be
needed
all
persons
contibution
, not
only
new
perons
but
also
a
experince&
#039; s
person
. It is
typically
disputed that
expert
more
likle
to
make
imporatant
contribution
rather
than
beginner
.
Personally
, I disagree with this statement,
i
believe that for any
work
,
expert
pay more attention
rather
than new
person
. I feel this way for several reasons, which
i
will explore in the following essay.

First of all
, what is the definition of
expert
?
it
is obvious that
some one
who
experince
and doing the same things long time. Although
contibutions
does not always
deoneds
on
beginner
or
expert
but
it is surest that to gain any success
must
be
needed
exper
contribution
. In the beginning, as a starter
needed
to do
somthing
much and
needed
lots
of
trining
since they can
improve
his or her
self
but
this beginning effort could not
surely
bring
any
succed
.
for
example, in a
socar
team always open for a
beginner
but
always depends on the senior player more
specifically
like
leonal
messi
in
barcelona
. Although when he
joined
barcelona
tem
as a
good
talanted
player and
makes
lots
of
contribution
but
this team
only
when
depnds
ronaldinho
.
this
dependence and
contribution
now
shows
in present
barcelona
team.
moreover
, for outcome from any task, though
needed
any
persons
contribution
but
always
bring
better and more
positivily
by the senior
experince
person.

Secondly
, if we are trying to do
something
successfully
, we need to always depend on
expert
people
.
to
make
a
work
sucessful
,
needed
a joint
hard
work
.
expert
always do
something
is like
relaible
without
expert
opinion and
plane
would not possible to
bring
any success.
For example
, if
some one
try to admit USA university
must
be
needed
some
Knowledge about related field research
experince
.
so
, in every field always
prefare
expert
people
.

finally
,
contribution
not
only
means to effort, it is always indicates
lots
of things.
sometimes
and it is
important
for
beginner
to do
sometimg
lots
because
actually
this
times
helps
to
makes
them
experince
but
if
something
bring
success then to considered
contribution
.
For example
,
i
wanted to
bring
my MS degree from USA university,
thus
i
needed
to
work
and a
superviser
though my supervisor
only
prefer me then he
confirm
my ability
but
it is true that supervisor is
higly
exper
and doing
lots
of
contribution
rathen
than as a
beginner
like me.

In conclusion
, for doing better
must
be
needed
expert
contribution
besides
beginner
. Although
someone belives
that
beginner
impacts more
rather
than
expert
but
i
personally


belive
that for any
work
expert
contribution
has
lot
.
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IELTS essay In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. v. 2

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  American English
6 paragraphs
446 words
6.0
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