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In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. v.1

In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. v. 1
Nowadays, global warming has become an international serious concern. It is commonly believed that the use of hydrocarbon fuels should be forbidden instantly to stop the deteriorating situation from getting even worse while others think that such move would destroy the economic development across the globe. In my opinion, what have been destroyed in centuries cannot be fixed in years. Such transition to renewable energy resources should be smooth but serious to keep our planet valid for livening, First, the current technologies of renewable energy are not mature enough. Using only clean resources will result not meeting the massive demand of energy in our world today, which will destroy the industrial revolution we are living now. For example, solar power which depends on the use of panels to absorb the energy I sun rays still cannot exceed an efficiency of 20 percent. Slow transition to clean energy will give more time to get these technologies more mature. Second, I am convinced that most governments are not prepared financially for such a move. It is known that the initial investment to start using renewable energy in wide range is extremely high. This is why most countries who are concerned with moving to clean energy have to put long-term plans so that the yearly budget became more reasonable, For instance, the Germans have already accomplished big steps in this direction but still not finished yet according to their plan which ends in 2050. To conclude, serious steps must be taken to save our planet from the potential crises of climate change, however, these steps should be done according to long term plans so that the existing economy does not fall apart.
Nowadays, global warming has become an international serious concern. It is
commonly
believed that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of hydrocarbon fuels should
be forbidden
instantly
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the deteriorating situation from getting even worse while others
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think
that such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
would
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destroy
the economic development across the globe. In my opinion, what have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
in centuries cannot be
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fixed
in years. Such transition to renewable
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energy
resources should be smooth
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but
serious to
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keep
our planet valid for livening,

First
, the
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current
technologies of renewable
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energy
are not mature
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enough
. Using
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only
clean resources will result not meeting the massive demand of
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energy
in our world
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today
, which will
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destroy
the industrial revolution we are living
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now
.
For example
, solar power which depends on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of panels to absorb the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
I sun rays
still
cannot exceed an efficiency of 20 percent. Slow transition to clean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
will give more time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
these technologies more mature.

Second, I
am convinced
that most
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governments
are not prepared
financially
for such a
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move
. It
is known
that the initial investment to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
using renewable
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energy
in wide range is
extremely
high. This is why most countries who
are concerned
with moving to clean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
put long-term plans
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the yearly budget became more reasonable,
For instance
, the Germans have already accomplished
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big
steps in this direction
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but
still
not finished
yet
according to their plan which ends in 2050.

To conclude
, serious steps
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must
be taken
to save our planet from the potential crises of climate
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change
,
however
, these steps should
be done
according to long term plans
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the existing economy does not fall apart.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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