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In a person's life, he or she has had many influential people such as a mother, a father, a sibling, a close relative, or a friend. Describe an important person in your life. Then explain why the person is important to you. Be sure to use details v.1

In a person's life, he or she has had many influential people such as a mother, a father, a sibling, a close relative, or a friend. Describe an important person in your life. Then explain why the person is important to you. Be sure to use details v. 1
Nowadays, media have become more powerful since the development of communication technology. The influence of media on the society is undeniable. It is commonly argued that, people who operates the media has the power to control the views and attitudes of others, and little can be done to remedy this problem. In my opinion, I partially disagree with this view. On the one hand, it is reasonable that media governs, the people to some extent. Having control over the media means preferred information can be shown while disliked information is censored and removed from broadcasting. Moreover, people who control the media have the upper hand in adding their views and attitudes to the news while forecasting it. But most this information is believed by uneducated people. In short, it is clear that media can control illiterate people On the other hand, there are some people whose opinions are not affected by the media. Educated people can figure out the difference between the fake and real news. As a result, they have the capability to omit the distortions and think independently. In addition, media controllers can control what is being printed or telecasted, but they don't have control on peoples' views. For instance, if a crime is broadcasted on the television literates have the capability to know the truth of what is displayed. In other words, educated peoples' views can't be controlled by the media. There is a huge difference between these two groups of people. Education is the main criteria that separates these people. Uneducated people can't categorize the news whereas, educated, have the capability to do the same. The only way to reduce the power of media is providing education to the people. Government with the help NGOs should take initiative in educating the society. In conclusion, I am against the view, that the media controls the opinions of the people. There are some other people who thoughts can't be controlled by the media. Education is the best solution for this power house media
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media
have become more powerful since the development of communication technology. The influence of
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media
on the society is undeniable. It is
commonly
argued that,
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people
who
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operates
the
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media
has the power to
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control
the
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views
and attitudes of others, and
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little
can
be done
to remedy this problem. In my opinion, I
partially
disagree with this view.

On the one hand, it is reasonable that
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media
governs, the
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people
to
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some
extent. Having
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control
over the
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media
means preferred information can
be shown
while disliked information
is censored
and removed from broadcasting.
Moreover
,
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people
who
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control
the
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media
have the upper hand in adding their
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views
and attitudes to the news while forecasting it.
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But
most this information
is believed
by uneducated
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people
. In short, it is
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clear
that
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media
can
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control
illiterate
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people


On the
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other
hand, there are
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some
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people
whose opinions are not
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affected
by the
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media
. Educated
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people
can figure out the difference between the fake and real news.
As a result
, they have the capability to omit the distortions and
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think
independently
.
In addition
,
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media
controllers can
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control
what is
being printed
or
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telecasted
,
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but
they don't have
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control
on peoples'
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views
.
For instance
, if a crime
is broadcasted
on the television literates have the capability to know the truth of what
is displayed
. In
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other
words, educated peoples'
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views
can't
be controlled
by the media.

There is a huge difference between these two groups of
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people
. Education is the main criteria that separates these
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people
. Uneducated
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people
can't categorize the news whereas, educated, have the capability to do the same. The
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only
way to
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reduce
the power of
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media
is providing education to the
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people
.
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Government
with the
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help
NGOs should take initiative in educating the society.

In conclusion
, I am against the
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view
, that the
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media
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controls
the opinions of the
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people
. There are
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some
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other
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people
who thoughts can't
be controlled
by the
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media
. Education is the best solution for this power
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house
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media
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay In a person's life, he or she has had many influential people such as a mother, a father, a sibling, a close relative, or a friend. Describe an important person in your life. Then explain why the person is important to you. Be sure to use details v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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