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I have many friends right from my school days to college days. Among them, there is only one person who is very close to my heart, she is none other than my best friend sravani. She is tallented, intelligent girl and a doctor by profession. She is my best v.1

I have many friends right from my school days to college days. Among them, there is only one person who is very close to my heart, she is none other than my best friend sravani. She is tallented, intelligent girl and a doctor by profession. She is my best v. 1
In this modern world, it has been observed that, most of the people are having diseases because of their lifestyle, what they are following. Some people, including me, argue that, it is individual's ownership to cure their health rather than, thinking the government is responsible to care each citizen's well being. The following easy state both the views and the points to support my view. On the one hand, nowadays, many illnesses have been started impacting the human because of their improper eating habit and lack of physical exercise. Most of these, can be reduced by changing the food intake. It should remember, it is an individual's who has to suffer, when they catch by major health issue. Moreover, citizen should keep in mind that, their family is fully dependent on them. Any one cannot share the patient's pain or sufferings. Everyone should understand that, most of these contagious diseases can be prevented by following a balanced diet. They have to give a little importance to the quality and quantity of the food. On the other hand, the authority can start giving awareness classes or camps about the hereditary diseases. Additionally, the law enforcing agency can teach mothers about the importance of the good living habit and physical work. For example, in India, the government has started providing free vaccinations and nutrient rich foods to babies, with a view to protect them from mostly impacting illness. Furthermore, these activities have extra-ordinary positive response from the society and it helps country to get rid of life threaten attacks. In conclusion, it is the individual's duty to protect them from unhealthy living habit as they have to suffer the after effects of the diseases. However, the government can bring trainings and injections to safeguard their generations from poor quality lifestyle.
In this modern world, it has
been observed
that, most of the
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people
are having
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diseases
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because
of their lifestyle, what they are following.
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Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, including me, argue that, it is individual's ownership to cure their health
rather
than, thinking the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is responsible to care each citizen's
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well being
. The following easy state both the views and the points to support my view.

On the one hand, nowadays,
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many
illnesses have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
impacting the human
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their improper eating habit and lack of physical exercise. Most of these, can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
by changing the food intake. It should remember, it is an individual's who
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
suffer, when they catch by major health issue.
Moreover
, citizen should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in mind that, their family is
fully
dependent on them.
Did you mean "Anyone"?
Any one
cannot share the patient's pain or sufferings. Everyone should understand that, most of these contagious
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diseases
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
by following a balanced diet. They
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
give a
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little
importance to the quality and quantity of the food.

On the other hand
, the authority can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
giving awareness classes or camps about the hereditary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
.
Additionally
, the law enforcing agency can teach mothers about the importance of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
living habit and physical work.
For example
, in India, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
providing free vaccinations and nutrient rich foods to babies, with a view to protect them from
mostly
impacting illness.
Furthermore
, these activities have extra-ordinary
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response from the society and it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
country to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of life threaten attacks.

In conclusion
, it is the individual's duty to protect them from unhealthy living habit as they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
suffer the after effects of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
.
However
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can bring trainings and injections to safeguard their generations from poor quality lifestyle.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay I have many friends right from my school days to college days. Among them, there is only one person who is very close to my heart, she is none other than my best friend sravani. She is tallented, intelligent girl and a doctor by profession. She is my best v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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