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In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2, 200 years old. Each clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rod. The v.2

In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2, 200 years old. Each clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rod. The v. 2
The reading passage and lecture have conflicting opinions about whether or not the clay jars found in Iraq were used as electric batteries. The article strongly postulates that its most likey those jars weren' t used to generate electricity for several assumptions. On the other hand, the listening adamantly delinates that none of the arguments presented in the text are convincing. First and foremost, according to the author of the excerpt, the excavation would have resulted in conductors or metal wires connected to the vessels, if they were used as electric batteries. Nonetheless, the lecture offsets these points by insisting that the vessels were found by locals not trained people. In other words, the vessels weren' t found by an archaeologist, so the individuals who found the vessels may didn' t notice the wires. On top of this, the professor in lecture further points out that the copper found in vessels are similar to that copper used for holding scrolls in Seleucia. However, this thing doesn' t prove anything. the ancient may be discovered that using these vessels and liquid would produce electricity. These claims refute the writer implications of how the copper cylinders in vessels were used for hanging scrolls of rare texts. The article lastly asserts that people in the past didn' t have any device that works on electricity. wich means the vessels may have been useless for them. The speaker in lecture counters these points by insisting that the electric batteries would have been used to create a mild shock. also, people in the past claimed they had visible powers. Moreover, the vessels would have used for healing, for instance, to stretch mussels.
The reading passage and
lecture
have conflicting opinions about
whether or not
the clay jars
found
in Iraq were
used
as electric batteries. The article
strongly
postulates that its most
likey
those jars
weren&
#039; t
used
to generate electricity for several assumptions.
On the other hand
, the listening
adamantly
delinates
that none of the arguments presented in the text are convincing.

First
and foremost, according to the author of the excerpt, the excavation would have resulted in conductors or metal wires connected to the
vessels
, if they were
used
as electric batteries. Nonetheless, the
lecture
offsets these points by insisting that the
vessels
were
found
by locals not trained
people
.
In other words
, the
vessels
weren&
#039; t
found
by an archaeologist,
so
the individuals who
found
the
vessels
may
didn&
#039; t notice the wires.

On top of this, the professor in
lecture
further
points out that the copper
found
in
vessels
are similar to that copper
used
for holding scrolls in
Seleucia
.
However
, this thing
doesn&
#039; t prove anything.
the
ancient may
be discovered
that using these
vessels
and liquid would produce electricity. These claims refute the writer implications of how the copper cylinders in
vessels
were
used
for hanging scrolls of rare texts.

The article
lastly
asserts that
people
in the past
didn&
#039; t have any device that works on electricity.
wich
means the
vessels
may have been useless for them. The speaker in
lecture
counters these points by insisting that the electric batteries would have been
used
to create a mild shock.
also
,
people
in the past claimed they had visible powers.
Moreover
, the
vessels
would have
used
for healing,
for instance
, to stretch mussels.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2, 200 years old. Each clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rod. The v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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