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TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2, 200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin v.2

TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2, 200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin v. 2
Both passage and lecture discuss a vessel that was found by villagers constructing a railroad in Iraq, which is attributed to be a ancient electric batteries. The writer brings up the idea that this things it is unlikely that these things used as electric batteries, however, the speaker rejects the claim made in the passage. Firstly, the professor argues that vessels was discovered by local people and villagers and they might find something that local people though that they are unimportant because these people did not train, hence threw away them. So, it is probable that in the area that villagers discovered wires and other conductors exists. By contrast, the author brings up a point that there is not any evidence of metal wires and conductors near excavated areas and thus, clay jars are not electric batteries. Secondly, the lecturer states that it is true that copper cylinders look like the same as Seleucia, who used copper for holding scrolls, but this is not proved at all. She continues by stating that it is likely that firstly, ancient people utilized copper cylinders for holding scrolls and then they used in iron rods in order to produce electricity. Therefore, the ancient people utilized copper cylinder at first for one purpose and then, they adapted them to another aim. On the contrary, the author of passage believes that copper cylinders inside jars were used same as Seleucia, which was ancient city located nearby for holding scrolls. Finally, although the writer claims that electric batteries were useless for ancient people because there were not any devices that replied on electricity, the speaker challenges this claim by saying that ancient people use electric current for creating mild shocks and tringling sensation. It is argued in the lecture that ancient people used electricity for convincing that they have magical power. Additionally, the professor points out that like modern medicine, ancient people make use of electric current for the healing of ailments and releasing sick people form pains, hence the electricity was useful for ancient people in the past time.
Both passage and lecture discuss a vessel that
was found
by villagers constructing a railroad in Iraq, which
is attributed
to be
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a
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ancient
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electric
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batteries
. The writer brings up the
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idea
that
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this
things it is unlikely that these things
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used
as
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electric
batteries,
however
, the speaker rejects the claim made in the passage.

Firstly
, the professor argues that vessels
was discovered
by local
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people
and
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villagers and
they might find something that local
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people
though that they are unimportant
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because
these
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people
did not train,
hence
threw away them.
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So
, it is probable that in the area that villagers discovered wires and other conductors exists. By contrast, the author brings up a point that there is not any evidence of metal wires and conductors near excavated areas and
thus
, clay jars are not
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electric
batteries.

Secondly
, the lecturer states that it is true that copper
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cylinders
look like the same as
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Seleucia
, who
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used
copper for holding scrolls,
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but
this is not proved at all. She continues by stating that it is likely that
firstly
,
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ancient
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people
utilized copper
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cylinders
for holding
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scrolls and
then they
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used
in iron rods in order to produce
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electricity
.
Therefore
, the
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ancient
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people
utilized copper
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cylinder
at
first
for one purpose and then, they adapted them to another aim.
On the contrary
, the author of passage believes that copper
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cylinders
inside jars were
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used
same as
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Seleucia
, which was
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ancient
city located nearby for holding scrolls.

Finally
, although the writer claims that
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electric
batteries were useless for
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ancient
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people
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because
there were not any devices that replied on
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electricity
, the speaker challenges this claim by saying that
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ancient
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people
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use
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electric
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current
for creating mild shocks and
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tringling
sensation. It
is argued
in the lecture that
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ancient
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people
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used
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electricity
for convincing that they have magical power.
Additionally
, the professor points out that like modern medicine,
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ancient
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people
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make
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use
of
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electric
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current
for the healing of ailments and releasing sick
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people
form pains,
hence
the
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electricity
was useful for
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ancient
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people
in the
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past time
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2, 200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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