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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.11

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. with this opinion? v. 11
Developed nations have to provide assistance for under developing countries to improve the three essential sectors such as health, education and trade. It is undoubtedly true that the wealthy countries should provide financial aid for the third world countries, but the poor nations also have to make an initiative to improve their nations. Aids from wealthy countries is highly essential for under developing nations to make an advancement since various of them have inadequate financial funding, technology and human resources to develop their nations. Australia, for instance, provides scholarships for the younger generation in the under developing countries to pursue higher degrees in universities. The main objective of this financial endowment is to improve the quality of human resources in recipient countries so that in years to come the nations will have a well-educated workforce. As a result, the poor countries will have a sufficient number of people who are able to contribute to their nation's developments and raise their nation prosperities. However, it does not mean that the under developing nations should only rely on international reliefs due to the fact that these assistants are provided for a limited period. The poor countries have to make an approach to collaborate with other nations on developing their nations. Timor-Leste, as an example, establishes a partnership with neighbouring countries such as Australia and Indonesia to manage their natural resources which revenue can be used to improve infrastructure, health and education sectors. Consequently, in a few decades later, not only they will have a well-built infrastructure, but also have advancement in other sectors. In conclusion, I agree that modern countries ought to support developing nations to improve the essential sectors in the countries. However, I also believe that the poor nations have to make long-term planning to make sure the sustainable development in their nations.
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developing
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countries
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improve
the three essential sectors such as health, education and trade. It is
undoubtedly
true that the wealthy
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countries
should provide financial aid for the third world
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countries
,
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but
the
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poor
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have to
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make
an initiative to
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their nations.

Aids from wealthy
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countries
is
highly
essential for under
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developing
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nations
to
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make
an advancement since various of them have inadequate financial funding, technology and human resources to develop their
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nations
. Australia,
for instance
, provides scholarships for the younger generation in the under
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developing
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countries
to pursue higher degrees in universities. The main objective of this financial endowment is to
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improve
the quality of human resources in recipient
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countries
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so
that in years to
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come
the
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nations
will have a well-educated workforce.
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, the
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poor
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countries
will have a sufficient number of
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people
who are able to contribute to their nation's developments and raise their
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nation
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prosperities
.

However
, it does not mean that the under
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developing
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nations
should
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only
rely on international reliefs due to the fact that these assistants
are provided
for a limited period. The
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poor
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countries
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have to
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make
an approach to collaborate with other
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nations
on
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developing
their
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nations
. Timor-Leste, as an example, establishes a partnership with
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neighbouring
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countries
such as Australia and Indonesia to manage their natural resources which revenue can be
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used
to
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improve
infrastructure, health and education sectors.
Consequently
, in a few decades later, not
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only
they will have a well-built infrastructure,
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but
also
have advancement in other sectors.

In conclusion
, I
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that modern
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developing
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to
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improve
the essential sectors in the
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countries
.
However
, I
also
believe that the
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poor
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nations
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have to
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make
long-term planning to
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make
sure the sustainable development in their
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nations
.
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IELTS essay Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. with this opinion? v. 11

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