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Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break. - Students must take a course which has no direct connection to t v.1

Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break. - Students must take a course which has no direct connection to t v. 1
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that time is gold, and people should use their time efficiently. There are many options for using the time which is related to the people’s priority. In this regard, universities provided some programs for the student to prosper students’ abilities. Not all people concur when this issue arises. To being cognizant to the logic behind those who endorse or repudiate the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that Doing some part-time jobs in hometowns for making better some facets of lifestyle in these cities are more profitable than taking some irrelevant courses in the universities in the breaks. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, acquiring a lot of experiences and having the contribution in the society could be picked out for further analysis. To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the importance of the experience in the modern world with its galloping rate as a stepping –stone for future, based upon the statistics of different general questionnaires in sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that students should put their knowledge into the practice by attending to some part-time jobs related to their majors. It helps them to obtain valuable experiences which could be combined with their educations, and cover the way toward the success. To elucidate on, educated people with high experiences and broaden horizons are flourished very easily in the society and they will occupy the prestigious job positions in the near future. For instance, I worked for an organization as the part-time job and I was very eager and successful in this work. This ability enhanced my chance for finding a good job in the big and prosperous company with high earning in future. In addition to the reason raised above; doing some positive change in the societies by young persons could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief. each member of a society is willing to contribute in the people’s life and they try to do some thing based on their abilities and situations. To delineate, students are not separated from this issue and it improves their self-confidence and penchant for working better. Thus, this reason stimulates them to make some alteration and attempt to make the situation better. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s sociology graduate students unveiled the fact that the collaborating young people with other memers of societies in the critical situation improve the performance of the infrastructure projects and they achieve better results. Drawing up the reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that participating in some projects of the university for improving the people’s life has been shown better results for students in comparing attending to some classes about the irrelevant major in their leisure times. It provides for them the situations for not only obtaining many experiences but also having the role in improving people’s life.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that
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time
is gold, and
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people
should
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use
their
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time
efficiently
. There are
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many
options for using the
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time
which
is related
to the
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people’s
priority. In this regard,
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universities
provided
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some
programs for the
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student
to prosper
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students’
abilities. Not all
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people
concur when this issue arises. To being cognizant to the logic behind those who endorse or repudiate the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that Doing
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some
part-time
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jobs
in hometowns for making
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better
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some
facets of lifestyle in these cities are more profitable than taking
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some
irrelevant courses in the
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universities
in the breaks. Among a
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plentitude
of
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reasons
in support of this assertion, acquiring
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a lot of
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experiences
and having the contribution in the
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society
could
be picked
out for
further
analysis.

To commence with, a consensus has
yet
to
be reached
;
however
, regarding the importance of the
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experience
in the modern world with its galloping rate as a stepping –stone for future, based upon the statistics of
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different
general questionnaires in sundry countries,
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people
are unanimous about the conviction that
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students
should put their knowledge into the practice by attending to
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some
part-time
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jobs
related to their majors. It
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helps
them to obtain valuable
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experiences
which could
be combined
with their educations, and cover the way toward the success. To elucidate on, educated
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people
with high
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experiences
and broaden horizons
are flourished
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very
easily
in the
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society and
they will occupy the prestigious
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job
positions in the near future.
For instance
, I worked for an organization as the part-time
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job and
I was
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very
eager and successful in this work. This ability enhanced my chance for finding a
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good
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job
in the
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big
and prosperous
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company
with high earning
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in future
.

In addition
to the
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reason
raised above; doing
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some
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positive
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change
in the
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societies
by young persons could
also
substantiate the
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justifiability
of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief.
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each
member of a
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society
is willing to contribute in the
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people’s
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life and
they try to do
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some thing
based on their abilities and
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situations
. To delineate,
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students
are not separated from this issue and it
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improves
their self-confidence and penchant for working
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better
.
Thus
, this
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reason
stimulates them to
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make
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some
alteration and attempt to
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make
the
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situation
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better
. A vivid example can be
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given
to shed light on what
was elaborated
above. The results of a study carried out by Rice
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University’s
sociology graduate
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students
unveiled the fact that the collaborating young
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people
with other
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memers
of
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societies
in the critical
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situation
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improve
the performance of the infrastructure
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projects and
they achieve
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better
results.

Drawing up the
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reasons
,
discreetly
put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic
is concerned
, I reiterate that participating in
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some
projects of the
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university
for improving the
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people’s
life has
been shown
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better
results for
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students
in comparing attending to
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some
classes about the irrelevant major in their leisure
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times
. It provides for them the
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situations
for not
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only
obtaining
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many
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experiences
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but
also
having the role in improving
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people’s
life.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break. - Students must take a course which has no direct connection to t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
531 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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