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Students of a university have a long break between universitysemesters; the university requires all students to do one of thefollowing for one month during the break: 1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no directconnection to their major v.1

Students of a university have a long break between universitysemesters; the university requires all students to do one of thefollowing for one month during the break: 1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no directconnection to their major v. 1
Changing multiple commercial domains in the professional career is the aim of certain people. While, some think it is better to serve a single business domain throughout their working life. I personally think that changing a job after a certain period of time is a best strategy. This essay will discuss this scenario, by considering the opinion of both sides by using the examples of Oxford University research and Time Magazine survey to demonstrate the points and support the claims. On the one hand, some people don't want to take risk in their working life. Therefore, they don’t like to change their jobs because of this factor. Furthermore, they fear that there is a chance that they will get worse working conditions, if they change the job. For example, Oxford University in 2015 researched that the people who are not curious to change their job are those who think that a job change is like playing a gamble. So from this example, it is clear that fear is the factor which bind the employees, all their working life in one organization. On the other hand, some people contradict this thinking, by saying that, if you will not challenge your life you will not calculate your own worth. Additionally, changing jobs at regular intervals will open new horizons of knowledge as in different organizations, they have their own challenges. Similarly, a survey of Times Magazine in 2018 suggests the same idea that 60% of UK professionals will change jobs frequently to educate themselves with the new challenges of the organization. So, from this example, it is clear that frequent job changing will increase your professional skills. To conclude, multiple job changes will give you more confidence, boost your morale and decrease your fear of job change. So, it is better to change job on frequent basis rather than sticking to one job. In the future, those who will not change jobs on regular intervals will not be able to compete this world.
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best strategy. This essay will discuss this scenario, by considering the opinion of both sides by using the
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examples
of Oxford University research and Time Magazine survey to demonstrate the points and support the claims.

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people
don't want to take
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.
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conditions, if they
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. For
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, Oxford University in 2015 researched that the
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that fear is the factor which bind the employees, all their
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in one organization.

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,
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contradict this thinking, by saying that, if you will not challenge your
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life
you will not calculate your
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own
worth.
Additionally
,
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changing
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at regular intervals will open new horizons of knowledge as in
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different
organizations, they have their
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own
challenges.
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that 60% of UK professionals will
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to educate themselves with the new challenges of the organization.
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, from this
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will increase your professional
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skills
.

To conclude
, multiple
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job
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changes
will give you more confidence, boost your morale and decrease your fear of
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job
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change
.
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So
, it is better to
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on frequent basis
rather
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job
. In the future, those who will not
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change
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jobs
on regular intervals will not be able to compete this world.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Students of a university have a long break between universitysemesters; the university requires all students to do one of thefollowing for one month during the break: 1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no directconnection to their major v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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