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In times of an economic crisis, in which area should governments reduce their spending? 1. Arts 2. Scientific research 3. Parks and public gardens. v.1

In times of an economic crisis, in which area should governments reduce their spending? 1. Arts 2. Scientific research 3. Parks and public gardens. v. 1
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that economy has played an important role in people’s life in each society. Sometimes, societies face with inflation and economic problem which the government should optimize the expense of money in various areas to deal with its damages. Not all people concur when this issue arises. To being cognizant to the logic behind those who endorse or repudiate the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that governments could decline the devoted budget in Arts for compensating its lacks in financial projects in the country rather than scientific areas and something related to people’s entertainment. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, importance of these areas specifically in people’s lifestyle could be picked out for further analysis. To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the valuable ideas proposed by scientist in solving different problem in the human society, based upon the statistics of different general questionnaires in sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that countries in myriad period of times have coped with their problems by helping elites of that societies. Their effort in solving problems in each area could not ignore, and they are vital for stimulating humankind to work hard for acquiring its goals. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s graduate economic students unveiled the fact that in the recent European economic crisis, about 85 active research teams worked on the causes and solution of this phenomenon, and their success was substantial for dealing with inflation in about 9 months. This example shows the significance of scientific research in society. In addition to the reason raised above, satisfying people in difficult situations for solving problems in peace and serenity could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, in the modern world with its galloping pace, people should endure the high pressure of work and complex life. Thus, governments could provide an appropriate condition for them to release stresses and being relaxed and unwind. To delineate, they should provide many facilities such as parks and garden for people leisure times. Thus, in this condition, governments could plan for solving economic problems in peace and without any public opposition. In addition, governments spend a lot of money for the gardens and parks before and its maintenance is reasonable. For instance, in the last Iran' s economic crises, the government gives many days vacation to its worker and officers for reducing costs and solve the inflation problem. Drawing upon the reason, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that governments should optimize the expense of money in unimportant and unnecessary areas such as Arts in critical situations for solving its problem.
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people’s
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society
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societies
face with inflation and
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economic
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problem
which the
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government
should optimize the expense of money in various
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areas
to deal with its damages. Not all
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people
concur when this issue arises. To being cognizant to the logic behind those who endorse or repudiate the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that
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governments
could decline the devoted budget in Arts for compensating its lacks in financial projects in the country
rather
than scientific
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areas
and something related to
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people’s
entertainment. Among a
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plentitude
of reasons in support of this assertion, importance of these
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areas
specifically
in
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people’s
lifestyle could
be picked
out for
further
analysis.

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yet
to
be reached
;
however
, regarding the valuable
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ideas
proposed by scientist in
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solving
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different
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problem
in the human
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society
, based upon the statistics of
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different
general questionnaires in sundry countries,
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people
are unanimous about the conviction that countries in myriad period of times have coped with their
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problems
by helping elites of that
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societies
. Their effort in
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solving
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problems
in each
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area
could not
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ignore
, and they are vital for stimulating humankind to work
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hard
for acquiring its goals. A vivid example can be
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given
to shed light on what
was elaborated
above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s graduate
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economic
students unveiled the fact that in the recent European
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economic
crisis, about 85 active research teams worked on the causes and solution of this phenomenon, and their success was substantial for dealing with inflation in about 9 months. This example
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shows
the significance of scientific research in society.

In addition
to the reason raised above, satisfying
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people
in difficult situations for
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solving
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problems
in peace and serenity could
also
substantiate the
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justifiability
of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, in the modern world with its galloping pace,
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people
should endure the high pressure of work and complex life.
Thus
,
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governments
could provide an appropriate condition for them to release
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stresses
and
being relaxed
and unwind. To delineate, they should provide
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many
facilities such as parks and garden for
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people
leisure times.
Thus
, in this condition,
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governments
could plan for
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solving
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economic
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problems
in peace and without any public opposition.
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,
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governments
spend
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a lot of
money for the gardens and parks
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before
and its maintenance is reasonable.
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, in the last
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economic
crises, the
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government
gives
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many
days vacation to its worker and officers for reducing costs and solve the inflation problem.

Drawing upon the reason,
discreetly
put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic
is concerned
, I reiterate that
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governments
should optimize the expense of money in unimportant and unnecessary
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areas
such as Arts in critical situations for
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solving
its
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problem
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In times of an economic crisis, in which area should governments reduce their spending? 1. Arts 2. Scientific research 3. Parks and public gardens. v. 1

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