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Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
How people buy their needs has changed many times since the beginning humanity’s adventure. In recent years, customers prefer to shop in large shopping centres or malls, which has resulted in the closure of many small local shops. I personally consider this a positive development due to several reasons which will be discussed in the following. To begin with, it is more profitable to shop in the malls rather than local shops. First, if one buys from local shops, he will be forced to spend some hours travelling to many of them in order to provide a simple list of supplies. On the other hand, malls offer a wide range of products at one place, which helps customers to save time. Second, unlike local shops, malls’ customers can save money with the discounts they get ordinarily or as a customers’ club member. Consequently, shopping at malls will result in saving time and money, the most valuable assets in the modern life. Moreover, being a mall’s customer is an environmentally friendly thing. As said before, the travels one needs to do for buying will be less by shopping at malls. Less travel means less cars in the street, meaning less traffic as well as less air pollution. Research conducted in the UK has shown that after introduction of malls, the traffic and air pollution has decreased in the cities with them. Granted, what was said, it must be considered that mall shopping is deteriorating for the local economy. Local shops play a huge role in escalating local economy since they provide jobs for many individuals from nearby. Many people, who used to be the owner of one local shop, has been put out of the work by malls. To sum up, I am fond of travelling to the malls for shopping inasmuch as saving money, time and nature. Natural selection states the old destinies for the sake of new good, as do local shops for shopping centres.
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their needs has
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changed
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since the beginning humanity’s adventure. In recent years,
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customers
prefer to
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shop
in large
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shopping
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centres
or
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malls
, which has resulted in the closure of
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many
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small
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local
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shops
. I
personally
consider this a
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positive
development due to several reasons which will
be discussed
in the following.

To
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with, it is more profitable to
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shop
in the
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rather
than
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local
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shops
.
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, if one
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from
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local
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, he will
be forced
to spend
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some
hours travelling to
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many
of them in order to provide a simple list of supplies.
On the other hand
,
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offer a wide range of products at one place, which
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helps
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customers
to save
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time
. Second, unlike
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local
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shops
,
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malls’
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customers
can save money with the discounts they
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get
ordinarily
or as a
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customers’
club member.
Consequently
,
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shopping
at
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malls
will result in saving
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time
and money, the most valuable assets in the modern life.

Moreover
, being a
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mall’s
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customer
is an
environmentally
friendly thing. As said
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before
, the travels one needs to do for buying will be
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less
by
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at
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.
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travel means
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less
cars in the street, meaning
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traffic
as well
as
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less
air pollution. Research conducted in the UK has shown that after introduction of
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malls
, the traffic and air pollution has decreased in the cities with them.

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was said
, it
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that
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mall
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shopping
is deteriorating for the
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local
economy.
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shops
play a huge role in escalating
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local
economy since they provide jobs for
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many
individuals from nearby.
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, who
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used
to be the owner of one
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local
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shop
, has
been put
out of the work by malls.

To sum up, I am fond of travelling to the
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malls
for
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shopping
inasmuch as saving money,
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time
and nature. Natural selection states the
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old
destinies for the sake of new
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good
, as do
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local
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for
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IELTS essay Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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