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Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Introduction In the modern era, rarely, there is a vacant area that can be used to build a facility profitable for the community. If there is such a place in my neighbourhood, I would like to build a sports centre equipped with swimming pool and jogging track. I believe it will be benefitted the people for several reason I would like to elaborate more in the next paragraph. First, there is a need of a place to exercise in the convoluted area. My hometown is crowded with skyscraper and town office, therefore, we have a lack of a facility that comfortable, safe, and affordable to work out. The meagre of the sports centre make the dweller of my hometown have aversion to work out hence the declining of quality of life. The lack of exercise is detrimental to the people. Second, the sports centre where equipped with swimming pool will benefit the senior citizen in my hometown. It is a fact that elderly need a low impact and a high-intensity workout. This will be provided by workout regimen in swimming pool since the water lessens the workload of the joints and the muscles. The insufficient quantity of empty land contributed to the sparse number of swimming pool because of they most likely unable to build the facility in their backyard. Lastly, the gym membership is expensive. The place that adequate to facilitated high-quality exercise is very costly. It is reserved for affluent people and the middle-class community would unlikely use it. Additionally, the gym usually located in a downtown area where there is no subway line or unreachable by other public transportation. I personally believe that a sports centre will benefit the community immeasurably. All the things considered, the sports centre would become a celebrated addition to my hometown
Introduction

In the modern era, rarely, there is a vacant area that can be
used
to build a facility profitable for the community. If there is such a place in my
neighbourhood
, I would like to build a
sports
centre
equipped with swimming
pool
and jogging
track
. I believe it will be
benefitted
the
people
for
several reason
I would like to elaborate more in the
next
paragraph.

First
, there is a need of a place to exercise in the convoluted area. My
hometown
is crowded
with skyscraper and town office,
therefore
, we have a lack of a facility that comfortable, safe, and affordable to work out.
The meagre of
the
sports
centre
make
the dweller of my
hometown
have aversion to work out
hence
the declining of quality of life. The lack of exercise is detrimental to the
people
.

Second, the
sports
centre
where equipped with swimming
pool
will benefit the senior citizen in my
hometown
. It is a fact that elderly need a low impact and a high-intensity workout. This will
be provided
by workout regimen in swimming
pool
since the water lessens the workload of the joints and the muscles. The insufficient quantity of empty land contributed to the sparse number of swimming
pool
because of they
most likely unable to build the facility in their backyard.

Lastly
, the gym membership is expensive. The place that adequate to facilitated high-quality exercise is
very
costly. It
is reserved
for affluent
people
and the middle-
class
community would unlikely
use
it.
Additionally
, the gym
usually
located in a downtown area where there is no subway line or unreachable by other public transportation.

I
personally
believe that a
sports
centre
will benefit the community
immeasurably
. All the things considered, the
sports
centre
would become a celebrated addition to my
hometown
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
298 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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